Deceptive Limb

According to my computer I wrote this in July. Normally I have a recollection of writing something (or a reason as to why I have no recollection), but I have neither for this. I vaguely remember reading it once whilst browsing my folder of writing. Huh.

My eyes gravitate toward the stars

A fascination with the intangible

I can feel their mysterious powers bleeding

Out into space and into the atmosphere

I take a deep breath to hold it in

For as long as I can

 

I never want to let it go

Stuck in a gravitational pull

But eventually I'll be thrown out

Back into the endless borders of space

 

My heart meanders up a twisted path

Snaking around the trunks of ancient trees

Old friends with barely recognizable faces

Stare down at me coercing me to stop

I halt at a smiling, beckoning tree

For as long as I can

 

I never want to let it go

Stuck in a mellifluous breeze

But eventually it will die down

And I'll be alone in a barren field

 

My mind carries me across a winter landscape

The trees to my sides collapse under the snow

Their eyes and their smiles gone

The stars and planets above me begin to move

At first slipping toward me then swallowed whole

 

I don't want to ever let it go

Tearing my hands back from the outstretched limb

I lower my head and scrape off the frozen tears

Solidified onto my skin like the memories in my heart

Author's Note

Originally the second and fourth stanzas are each repeated after the fifth stanza, but I took them out to reduce repetition.

Reviews

[Last Lying Look]

Wow.
I really liked this.
It had an interesting vibe to it.
Another great write.
-E.R

[Lyrical Love]

I don't believe in accidents or coincidence. I was doing something-totally unrelated to poetry or WC.
I was feeling like my energy (my core being) was off. I sit down at my computer to see what is up with my direction feeling lost and I read one of my poem that you reviewed. I felt your face. Clicked on it and went to this poem. It completely depicts what I am feeling-and that ...I never want to let it go
Stuck in a gravitational pull
But eventually I'll be thrown out
Back into the endless borders of space.
It's surreal. I am also seeing myself in the ending of this... I don't want to ever let it go
Tearing my hands back from the outstretched limb
I lower my head and scrape off the frozen tears
Solidified onto my skin like the memories in my
heart.
POWERFUL WRITE! -especially since you have no recollection of the muse, or crafting of this piece.

[~Unashamed Love~]

I gotta admit that I didn't get the whole thing,
but this part mesmerized me for unknown reasons:

"I never want to let it go
Stuck in a gravitational pull
But eventually I'll be thrown out
Back into the endless borders of space"

Probably one of the prettiest stanzas I've read so far. Good Job!
=)

[Jewels]

Captivating.

[Emily Elizabeth]

Wonderful physical imagery, has a very other-worldly feel. Quite profound, too.
You definitely have a talent!

[Flame DM]

another great poem, well penned XD!

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[luke312]

Be proud for this is good. nice depiction and righteous expression