Dumpster

Wrote this in a few minutes.

Stuck
Sucked
Deep into the swollen sand

Trust
Fucked
By my own two quaking hands

Well the sun is just too bright
But my eyes need a little light
Where is the moon tonight?
I think I'm running out of time
I think I'm walking off the line
Sometimes I feel like I'm going to die
This never passes, and I know why

Let this fire be the catalyst
And let this dam be the subject
Let this edifice collapse
Now sit back and let the waters crash

Smash against my forehead
Wash away my hatred
I'm tired of this stagnant well
This dumpster in which I dwell
So bash my f*****g head in
Make me happy again

Author's Note

Although the word "you" is not used directly, it is implied in phrases such as "Now sit back...". However, the word "you" refers to me, not the reader. This one makes sense to me, but then again I wrote it, and sometimes I'll reread something I've written a few days later and be like "WTF!" :P

Reviews

[Rainbow Ladybug]

WOW! Thats amazing... so to say.... It left f*****g speachless! :D :D :D :D :D :D

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your winning poem!

[Nicole Archer]

lmfao, i like this alot.
"So bash my f*****g head in,
make me happy again."
Very good read, man.
good job.
=D

[Meredith Leigh]

Great word play, choice of words and rhyme scheme. The overall mood of the poem was kinda neat too. Great work!

- Kriss

[Jimmy Greenie]

Weird. I admit I'm not entirely sure what this is all about. The person is lost? where? Or is it just a metaphore?
Still good though. well done