The Nightmare

The Nightmare

A Poem by C.J.
"

I had to do this after dreams

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The Nightmare

The pain in your sleep,

Thoughts that will scare the darkest of people.

A fight that can never be won.

Being chased thru a maze with no end,

A new enemy arouses from every turn.

Unable to move paralyzed were you stand,

Unable to yell out a plea for help.

Death comes but you remain immortal.

Just wanting it to end.

The light saves you from the eternal fate.

You awake in a cold sweat gasping for air,

It is finaly over.

But you cant escape it,

Sleep will find you somehow.

 

                  

© 2009 C.J.


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The Nightmare
The pain in your sleep,
Thoughts that will scare the darkest of people.
A fight that can never be won.
Being chased thru a maze with no end,
A new enemy arouses from every turn.
Unable to move paralyzed were you are standing,
Unable to yell out a plea for help.
Death comes but you remain immortal.
Just wanting it to end.
The light saves you and brings you too.
You awake in a cold sweat gasping for air,
It is finaly over.
But you cant escape it,
Sleep will find you somehow.

As I mentioned in my comment about your other poem 'Dreams', I like the contrast you use between light and night. Here, 'Light' takes on a different form as it saves, but in 'Dreams' the word 'Light' is something less desired. I particularly like the line 'Death comes but you remain immortal.'. One of the best lines I've read since Coleridge and 'Water, water, everywhere, And all the boards did shrink; Water, water, everywhere, Nor any drop to drink.'. Well done you!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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The Nightmare
The pain in your sleep,
Thoughts that will scare the darkest of people.
A fight that can never be won.
Being chased thru a maze with no end,
A new enemy arouses from every turn.
Unable to move paralyzed were you are standing,
Unable to yell out a plea for help.
Death comes but you remain immortal.
Just wanting it to end.
The light saves you and brings you too.
You awake in a cold sweat gasping for air,
It is finaly over.
But you cant escape it,
Sleep will find you somehow.

As I mentioned in my comment about your other poem 'Dreams', I like the contrast you use between light and night. Here, 'Light' takes on a different form as it saves, but in 'Dreams' the word 'Light' is something less desired. I particularly like the line 'Death comes but you remain immortal.'. One of the best lines I've read since Coleridge and 'Water, water, everywhere, And all the boards did shrink; Water, water, everywhere, Nor any drop to drink.'. Well done you!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i think you are right, however you can try to control your dreams, if you can master the ability to have control of your unconcious as well as your concious
i am working on it, letting myself dream whatever when i think it can be a sort of preminition, but changing it when i do not like it

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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It was good. Quite descriptive and very true. Very climatic poem.

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Oh, this left me breathless.
Lovely lovely and very true.
Flora.

Posted 15 Years Ago


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I really like these lines:
You awake in a cold sweat gasping for air,
It is finaly over.
But you cant escape it,
Sleep will find you somehow.

I have night terrors, and you describe it wonderfully. I live on caffeine and insomnia, but you're right, sleep is a sneaky culprit.. it has some tricks, like necessity, that will catch up with you.

Great write.

Posted 15 Years Ago


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I liked this. You did a good job. Good imagery too.

Posted 15 Years Ago


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woo nice pic lol

Posted 15 Years Ago


very interesting piece like the flow in this and lots of good imagery... nice job!!!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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