Alone

Something I wrote after my past love life stopped, about a few months ago. It's about my last ex. It's my first poem I've ever written so...

ALONE

A sharp edge

please cut into me.

Come, hurt me slowly

and ease this endless suffering.

 

The edge is embedded

It cuts, it stings, it bleeds, and it hurts-

but not as much as you did to me.

 

Did you enjoy it?

You took my battered heart

And held it in your lying hand.

I let you in and you invaded only

To shove desperation into every corner.

Did you enjoy it?

She is everything your second heart wants

And I said no.

I said not yet.

So you left me twice for her

The same person who stole my reason for loving another.

 

The edge goes deeper and trails up my arms

In smooth soothing strokes,

Red spurts out and it reminds me

of you and her.

You’re just like all the others.

I am now afraid to love again.

But life goes on

You are lucky my heart can be repaired.

Reviews

[Winslow Des Totes]

Very sharp syntax, I like how you repeat certain lines to give emphasis, and how you left it almost open ended. Very strong words and meaning, I only hope that if this is true you've grown passed the pain, and finally found someone worth trusting and worth someone as bright and courageous as you. Keep up the good work. :D

[Maria]

You used the perfect choice of words to capture this scene beautifully. For example, I really liked "trails up my arms". It's slower and really meaningful xx

[deepblue04]

I hope this didn't happen to you. But this is truly amazing and i like your work!!1

[Kitty Robinson]

This is beautiful!

[Brittany]

Aww...this was a great heartfelt poem. I like your word choices and flow. Great imagery and expression of feelings.

[Gina]

so sad made me cry i suck at reviewing

[M O O D i B R O W N]

woow deep stuff

[Shia]

This is really good for a first poem! I liked it, I like the line You took my battered heart And held it in your lying hand. I've been there.

[emrick]

I like the faith.yes life must move on.