Walking Out

just somehting I thought of

Silently,

I walk into your heart

I've found a home

now I'll never leave

Happiness bursts

I'm ecstatic

cause I know its my doing

but just as I walked in 

you walked out 

now I'm waiting for you

to smile

and let me back in

because now I'm homeless

and cold,

alone and needy

for nothing but your love

Reviews

[Chris G. Vaillancourt]

Beautiful, and well-expressed

[Koda Demitri Tucker-Elr..]

Awww!~ That made me sad! D:

[Rain (YouoweYoupay)]

I like the simplicity in your poems. What a sad short story. Keep writing.

[silentsmiles]

thats amazing. the way it is written really makes you see how quickly things can change

[al25]

Love the way the poem flows. Great job.

[Chocolate Marijuana]

Awwwwwww~ now this was sooooo beautiful >< It reminded me of a story I wrote I while ago. The choice of words is just perfect, and it hits where it's supposed to ^^
Gorgeous. I'll keep on reading your works. :)

[Sophistication]

Short, sweet, powerful, burst of emotion. I love the metaphor you used.

[manifesto]

Short bursts of strong emotion, nice work!

[shedevil]

this was so beautiful, my heart stoped! there was just the write amount of words to bring an impact, ending just as strongly as it began. keep writng because this was fabulious

[storiestotell]

I like it!
Favorite line....WHOLE POEM! It's emontional and heart felt!