Convert Me?

Convert Me?

A Poem by Yahallo
"

people can believe in one thing but not in another

"
i will admit it
i am a pretty
religious person
i believe
in God
in heaven
in love
but if you asked me
if i believed in myself
i'd tell you
i'm a bigger
atheist
than all of you
combined
i wish to
convert
but i'm afraid
it's gonna
hurt
i will
see you at the
final court



© 2017 Yahallo



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I like how your poem is both thought provoking and in some ways easy to understand. Now I know why you haven't capitalized the i's it makes perfect sense. I haven't seen the word atheism used to describe a lack of self belief before. The use of the word 'convert' gives me the impression you're talking about swapping one kind of atheism for another. Is that what you mean, or, for you, is it more about embracing self confidence while continuing to believe in a Supreme Being?

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yahallo

6 Months Ago

Thank you for your kind words and taking time to leave such an insightful review!

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I like how your poem is both thought provoking and in some ways easy to understand. Now I know why you haven't capitalized the i's it makes perfect sense. I haven't seen the word atheism used to describe a lack of self belief before. The use of the word 'convert' gives me the impression you're talking about swapping one kind of atheism for another. Is that what you mean, or, for you, is it more about embracing self confidence while continuing to believe in a Supreme Being?

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yahallo

6 Months Ago

Thank you for your kind words and taking time to leave such an insightful review!

I l.. read more
Ohh! I love how the shortness of this poem contrasts it's complex topic!
I really like the concept of this poem overall, but it would be great if you could fix up some small things, like capitalizing your "i's" and adding in punctuation. I love the poem overall, great work! :)

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yahallo

6 Months Ago

Thank you very much!

I didn't capitalize any of the "I's" because of disbelief in mys.. read more
Simple but sweet, I think everyone believes in something but I’m betting it’s not themselves, I’m the same

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yahallo

6 Months Ago

Thank you very much!

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Added on December 30, 2017
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