Bonfire

Bonfire

A Poem by YanZeros
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Bohemian Love (1/5)

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No I’m not in love I’m just Inspired

To the new things that have been going on in my life

The marvels I thought only with you it’ll realized

Which never occurred to me till you said your goodbyes


I never believe I’ll survive going through on this heartaches of mine

But then I started to understand It was all me that made the sacrifice

I won’t deny that you made me happy for once in awhile

You filled my life with joy and glory that I could cry



Until you take back all the words you said it was just a lie



No I’m not in love I’m just inspired

To the new things been going on in my life

I feel more weightless and free without sad thoughts in my mind

Only now I think for myself and the good people that surround me


To whom I believe deserves my attention and affection

I know from them it won’t be put to waste nor hate

I will take my time and stay for awhile

Enjoying the music 'n sounding beat on this big ol’ bonfire


I’m saying no I’m not in love I’m just inspired

Now I can rest easy and sleep well at night

Praying for tomorrow that will come

A chance I’ll fall in love again will be the right one



And I advice myself to be more careful on giving my heart away





Thank you very much J Todd Underhill for featuring this poetry in your soundcloud channel and thank you also for correcting some words I so much appreciate it! Thank you very much! 


Coffee With Underhill soundcloud reading link: https://soundcloud.com/user-557255780/coffee-with-underhill-12-15-2016

J Todd Underhill Writerscafe link: http://www.writerscafe.org/J%20Todd%20Underhill

Do check J's soundcloud channel for more poetry reading and have good time!



© 2016 YanZeros



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YanZeros
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I like the line: "I'm not in love, I'm just inspired" . . . this could apply to many things in life, besides people. I get the sense that this narrator is not being truthful with him/herself when saying this, tho. The story-in-a-poem shows that the other's actions were hurtful & this is one good way to turn pain into creativity. Very relatable storyline for us writers. There are a few places where the English construction isn't as smooth & clear as it could be. But your imagination & storytelling carries the reader thru the story with interest.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

11 Months Ago

Thank you Barleygirl! and Happy New Year! You got it right! I am so glad that the feelings that I wr.. read more



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Some very interesting thoughts and lines in this write. Valentine

Posted 11 Months Ago


YanZeros

10 Months Ago

Thank you Valentine! :)
I like the line: "I'm not in love, I'm just inspired" . . . this could apply to many things in life, besides people. I get the sense that this narrator is not being truthful with him/herself when saying this, tho. The story-in-a-poem shows that the other's actions were hurtful & this is one good way to turn pain into creativity. Very relatable storyline for us writers. There are a few places where the English construction isn't as smooth & clear as it could be. But your imagination & storytelling carries the reader thru the story with interest.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

11 Months Ago

Thank you Barleygirl! and Happy New Year! You got it right! I am so glad that the feelings that I wr.. read more
Why would we hold on to someone who causes us pain? I love how you show moving on to be so inspirational! Being with people who are happy and love us sets us free to be ourselves and love life

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

11 Months Ago

Thank you D. Connolly that's true :) I'm glad you find this poetry inspirational! Happy Holidays! :).. read more
A very good attempt at a very old theme. Certainly there are some corrections requires, so I suggest you take the advice of those who are much more experienced them myself. But reading between the lines I can follow your theme. Well done.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

11 Months Ago

Thank you Robert :) I'm glad you could relate and follow. Happy Holidays!
This poem could really give strength to people who have been through heartbreak. It started out a little dark, but then the mood lifted into something much more hopeful! There's always a chance that the future holds something better. Great work :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

11 Months Ago

Thank you for dropping by and for reviewing Amber Lily Your words are true! sending you good vibes! .. read more
I love this and how it feels like a song. I caught myself singing it instead of reading it. My favorite line is the last, "And I advise myself to be more careful on giving my heart away" How true and painful that is. Thank you for sharing YanZeros

Posted 12 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

12 Months Ago

DuffyDreamer and Rhia Thurman you two really love to sing do you? I wonder what's the tune these wor.. read more
I love this ^^ It reads a lot like a song, I can imagine someone in a movie or a musical singing this after a sad break up! You have a real talent for beautiful words :)

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

12 Months Ago

Thank you Rhia Thurman :) I was aiming to write it as a lyric like a song but I ended up like this. .. read more
I liked how you worked your way to the fact that you were at a bonfire, it shows the reader what kind of people are at a bonfire, which is a much deeper perspective than simply depicting a bonfire. Great write!

And I love this line...
"I feel more weightless and free without sad thoughts in my mind." :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

1 Year Ago

Thank you Cyprian Van Dyke :) sending you good vibes!
Cyprian Van Dyke

1 Year Ago

You're most welcome and thanks for the hood vibes! :)
"And I advice myself to be more careful on giving my heart away" Yuuup, I'm trying that too.
Lovely piece! I've read it over and over a couple of times now. It gets better and better :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

1 Year Ago

Thank you Gullia King :) I'm so glad you got caught up with this poetry! sending you good vibes! :)
Seems to me like wishful thinking.. It looks like you are trying to make yourself think otherwise..that you aren't in love..
"The marvels I thought only with you it’ll realized"
This line needs correction.. I like the flow in your poem.. Overall nice reading it ☺

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Haha you got me confused now.. Just let it be 😉
It's good to review your work ☺
YanZeros

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much! :D
Doodley

12 Months Ago

Add "be"....."it'll be realized". Better :)

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