Love Isn't A Game (A Poetry Game with YumnaKay)

Love Isn't A Game (A Poetry Game with YumnaKay)

A Poem by YanZeros
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Bohemian Love (4/5)

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Tiles cracking, the concrete surface in mild dew 

Storms raging, my mind blowing, having no clue 
Your words fits perfectly astonished in awe! 
My life was a mess 'til you came, out of the blue 

 

 

I feel like I can easily be honest 

You are the one I love, don't be astonished 
My lone cracked heart has now started to be healed 
I know, baby, from me nothing is left concealed 

 

 

Please accept it you really are beautiful 
If I do, will you accept, for each other, we are suitable 
But your month in July while I'm December 
Sigh.. That rising passion in dying ember 

 

 

I do care for you, why are you not afraid? 
Oh! Cruel! Cruel! Man, It’s my heart you invade! 
I surrender with no question love isn't a game 
'Twas but now it ignited like a flame 

 

 

Burn my soul drive me away closer to you 

I'm already here awaiting your touch, beside you 
Been like counting billion night stars waiting for you 
Now I can spend an eternity just looking at you

 











Thank you very much YumnaKay for accepting my challenge on this poetry game.  It was a lot of fun and very memorable experience :) I am glad to be called as one of your good friends here! 

Do check YumnaKay's writerscafe at this link: 
http://www.writerscafe.org/yumnakay 


© 2017 YanZeros



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YanZeros
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One of the best collaborations I've read in a while! I find your thoughts & your rhymes go together very smoothly & with a nice harmony. Some of your ideas about love ("spend an eternity looking at you") are widely used in love poems (I prefer more originality) . . . but the overall combination of all these ideas together does weave a more complex & interesting & fresh message of love. I think collaborating is not easy, since you can't be inside each other's heads, so it's amazing the way you each lead this poem in a solid, cohesive direction together! (((HUGS)))

Posted 12 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

12 Months Ago

Thank you barleygirl for relating to this poem. This is meant to be a poetry game challenging YumnaK.. read more
barleygirl

12 Months Ago

I'm even more impressed, now that I know each of you had only 5 minutes to pen the next line!
YanZeros

12 Months Ago

It is completely raw and open for corrections. :)



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An excellently built duet by two writers who's work I enjoy. I like the rhyme scheme and it's more impressive that you each only had a few minutes to bridge them. You both convey the tender openness and understanding that comes with a relationship. Thank you both for sharing this! I would like to try a collab sometime now.

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much Jack Necron! :D and good luck on challenging or finding someone to have a collabor.. read more
Jack Necron (Aubrey Jack Peaslee)

11 Months Ago

You are welcome and good vibes to you as well!
A amazing job by two talented writers. The words fell together create worthwhile words and thoughts for the reader. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

12 Months Ago

Thank you Coyote Poetry I'm so glad you enjoyed this poetry and I'm happy to receive your reviews! S.. read more
Coyote Poetry

11 Months Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
Very cute poem here. Yall worked together and it turned out beautiful. I'd like to try something like this. Looking forward to your next poetry game. Good vibes your way.

Posted 12 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

12 Months Ago

:) Thank you, and ummm I'm a guy owl! I'm glad you enjoyed it too!
OhSnapShley

12 Months Ago

Oh wow, lol i just assumed.. Like a dork. I changed my wording.
YanZeros

12 Months Ago

oh its alright :) xD keep that positive attitude going! :)
One of the best collaborations I've read in a while! I find your thoughts & your rhymes go together very smoothly & with a nice harmony. Some of your ideas about love ("spend an eternity looking at you") are widely used in love poems (I prefer more originality) . . . but the overall combination of all these ideas together does weave a more complex & interesting & fresh message of love. I think collaborating is not easy, since you can't be inside each other's heads, so it's amazing the way you each lead this poem in a solid, cohesive direction together! (((HUGS)))

Posted 12 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

12 Months Ago

Thank you barleygirl for relating to this poem. This is meant to be a poetry game challenging YumnaK.. read more
barleygirl

12 Months Ago

I'm even more impressed, now that I know each of you had only 5 minutes to pen the next line!
YanZeros

12 Months Ago

It is completely raw and open for corrections. :)
Again a beautiful poem!!
Different colors giving flavor to it..
Gud job :)

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

12 Months Ago

Thank you Ashish Kumar :) and thank you for reviewing this poetry on YumnaKay's cafe too! Sending yo.. read more
This is beautiful on many levels. You capture how easy it is to be totally open with the one you love. The feel of total acceptance is where it's at. Well done.

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

12 Months Ago

Thank you Enigma Monster :) Your words are precisely right! I'm glad the poetry game turns out to be.. read more
i love how you write it! it's beautiful!

Posted 12 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

12 Months Ago

Yes I co-wrote this poetry with the beautiful and ravishing Ms. YumnaKay :P Thank you kurohana I'm .. read more
that was a really beautiful poem...the amount of sweetness that shines through every verse is amazing

i especially like the the last stanza

Posted 12 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

12 Months Ago

Thank you Bhumika Rao :) it is! Sending you good vibes! :)
I loved how you wrote my every line with my favourite colour and your line with yours! Nice idea! 💜

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YanZeros

12 Months Ago

Don't hide in embarrassment but your lines were so captivating. :)
Dr. YumnaKay

12 Months Ago

Haha okay 😉

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