Hannibal Lick-ter

Hannibal Lick-ter

A Poem by Yari Garcia (Older Profile)
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A spur of the moment poem inspired by a picture prompt!

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Hannibal Lick-ter

I walked in the woods on a lazy afternoon
wishing to see something new.
I walked and walked, need to see something soon
my excitement is far and few.

And there in the path, what do I see?
A puppy staring back at me.
This isn't your average puppy or Terrier
This is Hannibal Lick-ter!

Curious to see, I approached the pup
And he looked at me with big gorgeous eyes.
Afraid to pet him, I said "what's up?"
I even had to ask him twice.

But Hannibal Lick-ter was cute indeed
The cutest thing I've seen any place

And when he asked if he could eat me
I said "Yes! You can eat my face!"


YG

© 2012 Yari Garcia (Older Profile)


Author's Note

Yari Garcia (Older Profile)
This poem was inspired by the picture prompt you see (click to enlarge).
If you'd like to get inspired by photos, check out the group "Picture Prompts!"

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CT
A competent, if honestly rather weak poem. You seem to place rhyming above natural poetic structure, a trait which can be rather jarring during reading. I suppose that one of the things preventing me from really enjoying the poem is my detachment from the subject matter. While I appreciate how cute this puppy is, and you do a good job of convincing the reader that this dog is, in fact, friggin' adorable, I guess I just find it hard to relate to all that much. I will, however, and much to my chagrin, admit that even a hardened cynic (*Note From the Subconscious- Don't listen to him. He's just being melodramatic. He does that. He's a lot less cynical than he likes to put on) like me chuckled at your incredibly lame yet paradoxically awesome eponymous pun.
All in all, not bad. Just not my glass of Chianti.
Good luck in your future poetic and prosaic endeavors, and for now, I bid thee adieu- CT


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yari Garcia (Older Profile)

11 Years Ago

LoL Thanks so much for the thorough, honest review! I must admit the ones that say "picture prompts".. read more



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more imagination coming to the fore...Works for yo doesn't it?

Posted 11 Years Ago


Cute!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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CT
A competent, if honestly rather weak poem. You seem to place rhyming above natural poetic structure, a trait which can be rather jarring during reading. I suppose that one of the things preventing me from really enjoying the poem is my detachment from the subject matter. While I appreciate how cute this puppy is, and you do a good job of convincing the reader that this dog is, in fact, friggin' adorable, I guess I just find it hard to relate to all that much. I will, however, and much to my chagrin, admit that even a hardened cynic (*Note From the Subconscious- Don't listen to him. He's just being melodramatic. He does that. He's a lot less cynical than he likes to put on) like me chuckled at your incredibly lame yet paradoxically awesome eponymous pun.
All in all, not bad. Just not my glass of Chianti.
Good luck in your future poetic and prosaic endeavors, and for now, I bid thee adieu- CT


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yari Garcia (Older Profile)

11 Years Ago

LoL Thanks so much for the thorough, honest review! I must admit the ones that say "picture prompts".. read more
ahahah, so cute ! Interesting creating a poem basing on one sense only (sight) and even of artificial nature - hope that wasn't an oxymoron xD - (You didn't see the dog, you've seen A PHOTO of the dog)

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is cute and it's also pretty creepy. I'm surprised no one has said creepy yet. The meter could use some fine tuning in certain lines, but overall it's a solid prompt write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Made me smile, good one.

Posted 11 Years Ago


cute

Posted 11 Years Ago


What a cute poem. I loved it, it made me smile.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Its sooooo cute!

Posted 11 Years Ago



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