Harper's City of Silence

Harper's City of Silence

A Book by Hannah Rose
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Harper loves the rain. It is the only sound her silent City cannot muffle.

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© 2017 Hannah Rose



WHAT AM I?: Nephilim WHAT AM I?: Nephilim
A teen boy gets killed, but trades his soul for another chance. He changes. A girl notices the new boy with silver eyes.

Author's Note

Hannah Rose
I apologize for punctuation errors. Just Ignore them if you can. I have someone willing to help me with them soon.

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Glad you're aware of the punctuation problems--also some misspelling.

Your story plays on the theme of silence contrasted against noise. You use a lot of poetic devices in your writing--images mostly. However, I would like to have seen those images on a more personal level with regards to Harper's life.

She comes across an introvert. Question: what's her last name and that of the community where she lives. My first thought was that the setting is somewhere in the Northwest, but I could be wrong.

Not to sound harsh, but there is something of a disconnect for me in this story. I wanted to know more about Harper. Playing her against the city and work place is a good idea, but her character has a lot of missing spaces--and I'm not sure if that was intentional or not. Harper really aroused my curiosity, but her character seems lost in the noise of her surroundings; adding some dialogue to all those thoughts would've been nice.

This seems more like a prosaic poem than a short story. I hope I didn't offend you

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hannah Rose

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you! That is a great point, and I will be taking your advice into major consideration!
William Yasanari Harris

2 Weeks Ago

You're welcome. I read your bio--I commend you on your desire to teach English in a foreign country.. read more
Hannah Rose

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks! I pray I never will!



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Wow! I - am - in - awe!! And to think you wrote the other 5 chapters in a matter of hours. Way - to - go!! It's so well written and so compelling and profound, it's brilliant!! Of course, there are spelling and punctuation mistakes (and usages of the wrong word here and there - "except" instead of "accept"; "coward" instead of "cowerred"), but you're already aware of that, so I that part is good. This has the vibe of The Miserable Mill meets 1984 with a tinge of A Wrinkle in Time, and creating a story from all that in such a musical way with interspersed additions of mystery (of thought-provoking enigmas that leave the reader wondering) is what makes this novella magical and utterly compelling. I will later go through it again, when I have a bit more time, and leave you my critiques on each chapter (for I do have notes on some specific factors of your narrative that I would like to address). Ride this high in the meantime, for you freaking have skill as a story-teller! This novella is beyond words! Well done overall!

Posted 1 Week Ago


Hannah Rose

1 Week Ago

Thank you so much! I actually wrote the 2-5 chapter the other day on another median and just uploade.. read more
Glad you're aware of the punctuation problems--also some misspelling.

Your story plays on the theme of silence contrasted against noise. You use a lot of poetic devices in your writing--images mostly. However, I would like to have seen those images on a more personal level with regards to Harper's life.

She comes across an introvert. Question: what's her last name and that of the community where she lives. My first thought was that the setting is somewhere in the Northwest, but I could be wrong.

Not to sound harsh, but there is something of a disconnect for me in this story. I wanted to know more about Harper. Playing her against the city and work place is a good idea, but her character has a lot of missing spaces--and I'm not sure if that was intentional or not. Harper really aroused my curiosity, but her character seems lost in the noise of her surroundings; adding some dialogue to all those thoughts would've been nice.

This seems more like a prosaic poem than a short story. I hope I didn't offend you

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hannah Rose

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you! That is a great point, and I will be taking your advice into major consideration!
William Yasanari Harris

2 Weeks Ago

You're welcome. I read your bio--I commend you on your desire to teach English in a foreign country.. read more
Hannah Rose

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks! I pray I never will!

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I'm a Figgie! I am 19, a barista, and a student. I plan on teaching English as a second language in a foreign country after graduating college, and I love to write. I am also a Christian and hope to .. more..

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