Do You See Anything?

Do You See Anything?

A Poem by Hannah Rose
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Mark 8:24 Jude 1:12

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Trees walking 
Fruitless, twice dead, uprooted 
Lips are talking  
Hidden reefs at love feasts, 
Feeding themselves, elites 
There are lives sulking 
Drying clouds, dying crowds 
 Lost stars with lofty scars 
 
Do you see anything? 

Insight to the blind 
Of trees without eyes 
Grace I must find 
To weave throughout lies 
Sycamore with no wisdom
Blurred is my sight
Be thou my vision
Restore with thy light

© 2017 Hannah Rose



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Structured well; very fluid; the message strong, and every line packs a decent punch. I particularly enjoyed the rhymes and assonance scattered about the poem. Very fine work indeed. I only didn't feel the "vision" sequence. It seemed like something was missing from it - like a definitive purpose for their presence and presented sequence. The last few lines simply felt a tad anticlimactic to me. But otherwise well done!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emipoemi

1 Month Ago

It's not so much the lines themselves, but the four repetitions in a row of the word "vision". By th.. read more
Hannah Rose

1 Month Ago

Thank you! I will definitely be considering your advice!
emipoemi

1 Month Ago

Glad I could be of help



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Structured well; very fluid; the message strong, and every line packs a decent punch. I particularly enjoyed the rhymes and assonance scattered about the poem. Very fine work indeed. I only didn't feel the "vision" sequence. It seemed like something was missing from it - like a definitive purpose for their presence and presented sequence. The last few lines simply felt a tad anticlimactic to me. But otherwise well done!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emipoemi

1 Month Ago

It's not so much the lines themselves, but the four repetitions in a row of the word "vision". By th.. read more
Hannah Rose

1 Month Ago

Thank you! I will definitely be considering your advice!
emipoemi

1 Month Ago

Glad I could be of help

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Hannah Rose
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I am 19, a barista, and a student. I plan on teaching English as a second language in a foreign country after graduating college, and I love to write. I am also a Christian and hope to use my writing .. more..

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