A kind of love

Twins are a fighting

A never ending battle

Toys fly overhead 

Reviews

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

hahaha Hard morning huh ..... close your eyes and imagine you are on an isolated beach ... listen to the sound of the soft waves as they reach the shore .... feel the heat of the sun on your skin , relax , calm down ... enjoy the moment ...... Now .. open your eyes , your Kitchen table will never look the same after their finger colors game lol ...... hold on , scholl is back soon :)

[Yheela]

At least they stay in the same spot when colouring at the table ... ^_^

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

haha ... yes , now you only need to replace it

[Yheela]

Or I'll cover it with glass and call it art!

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

HAHA ...Creative ..... now let them paint your walls too

[Eloha]

haha! I bet they do. Sibling love is a funny kind.

[Yheela]

Yes, it's sometimes hard to understand.

[paulo]

How can such a teenie weenie poem have lead to such a long-winded review. I would reduce to two lines or call it triplets

[Yheela]

I'm not really following, a critique the poem or to one of the reviews?

[paulo]

Just pointing out that ur lovely little poem consists of only 11 words, two of which are "a", but somehow the featured review runs to 8 lines.
My suggestion was to rework it to two lines, or keep the current 3 line structure , but mentio triplets not twins.
S**t, now i'm going on & on too.

[Yheela]

LOL
Thanks. But this is about my twins, so I'll keep it just the same.
Appreciate your thoughts!

[Yheela]

And a haiku/tanka usually has the structure of 5/7/5 syllables. This is what I'm trying to do.

[paulo]

I didn't know that, Yheela. In fact I really don't know very much at all about poetry, and really shouldn't be giving advice.

You know the good thing about twins fighting is that they are generally evenly matched. Best wishes to you and your boys.

[Yheela]

Ha!
Well who says you have to be an expert, all poetry is subjective anyway.

[Revery]

Haha, yup. Twins, siblings, all the same. Do they ever grow out of that?

[Yheela]

I don't think so (am an only child) but my hubby seems to keep it up with his sisters. ^_^

[Revery]

I have three and know the strife all too well.

[Yheela]

LOL

[Neva Flores - Changeful..]

love it.......my daughter is expecting fraternal twins in January 2013....is this what I have to look forward to?

[Yheela]

What a blessing! Twins are wonderful, and horrific at the same time. ^_^
Mine are 5y now, and they play and fight and play and fight all day long.

[Chemical Kitten]

I really lie this haiku. Even though it's written about twins, just about every sibling can relate to it. It has a nice ring to it.

[Yheela]

Thank you, I'm sure it's the same for everyone who has a brother or sister.

[Dr. Wood ?]

The world at war....It's ok for them...they do not have to duck!!!

[Yheela]

lol
Yes, they don't seem to mind at all.