Tail Woman

Tail Woman

A Poem by Viki Rachel
"

Guess what creature this is about.

"

Pulled under the water,

By someone I don't know.

I catch a glimpse of redness;

And a golden, shimmery glow.

 

A fish, mayhap--a large one,

With flesh I've seen before.

My fingers touch something familiar;

And now I'm dying to know more.

 

Fluidity unbeknownst to me,

Swift movements of a tail.

Encirling me like I'm pray;

My nervous arms and legs flail.

 

I hear a laugh behind me,

And a strong grip upon my arm.

After the giggle follows the words,

"Be still; I meant no harm."

 

A finger on my lips,

Two golden eyes bore into my own;

And though I am so close to drowning,

I have never felt so close to home.

 

Her beauty does not cease to astound me;

Her plump lips and golden curls.

Suddenly, I am convinced;

She is what I've wanted from so many girls.

 

I try to swim up to the water,

To stay alive, and then with her forever;

But her grip is not releasing,

And I have never been too clever.

 

"Why would you leave me?",

She whimpers, putting an ache inside my heart;

"Do you not love me, as I love you?

Would you desire us to be apart?"

 

Her lips press down on mine

In a soft, yet hungry fahsion;

On my behalf, I was quite eager,

Vying for her passion.

 

But darkness is coming too quicky,

And I'm struggling now to breathe.

Her tongue is down my throat,

As if begging me not to leave.

 

My body is sagging and limping,

With scarce breath in either lung;

And now I understand,

Why I should have run away when she sung...

 


© 2011 Viki Rachel



Author's Note

Viki Rachel
Siren!

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

I saw a "Doctor Who" episode about sirens (don't mind my nerdiness) and you really captured the whole picture of the allurance, not being able to pull away. The cruel sensuality and horrifying beauty. I was so very delighted by this take on the subject. I think your rhymes really keep the poem rolling, making everything into a rhythm. Very easy to understand that way. I appreciate that.
I
Freaking
Love
You


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

The end of many a salty sailor. I love a good sea-farin' tale. (Ex-sailor that I am) A good one, Viki.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Viki Rachel

5 Years Ago

So happy to see your reviews once again! thank you, Sam!
the attraction of the sirens is strong. all those things we love that will destroy us one way or another. we know the truth, but still long to hear the siren's song.
i loved the poem. it was wonderfully done. flowed beautifully. and struck a chord with me.

Posted 5 Years Ago


I saw a "Doctor Who" episode about sirens (don't mind my nerdiness) and you really captured the whole picture of the allurance, not being able to pull away. The cruel sensuality and horrifying beauty. I was so very delighted by this take on the subject. I think your rhymes really keep the poem rolling, making everything into a rhythm. Very easy to understand that way. I appreciate that.
I
Freaking
Love
You


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent.

I was baffled (and wanting badly to find out) until the very last line, and then the truth dawned on me.

About that last line, though, the correct verb form would be: "should have run" (pardon me for being a grammar Nazi.)

I've used the metaphor of the siren's song in a couple of my writes. I find the power of the image to be very compelling, and I enjoyed the way you treated the subject.

Posted 6 Years Ago


i was enthralled by the beggining! you kept it descriptive and fluid! how do you have such choice of words? I don't think I'll ever know.

One of you're longest, one of your most descriptive, one of your best!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ah, but don't we all love sirens? To be captured, held without restraints, isn't that, after all is said and done, the essence of love? ^_' Well, love love love this poem!

Posted 6 Years Ago


AH! Such a perfect poem of how sirens are perceived! Singing their lovely song, luring the men on boats just to pull them to their deaths below the sea! I'm writing a book about mermaids (Somewhat a relative of the sirens) so this gave me great inspiration. I wouldn't change a thing!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

493 Views
7 Reviews
Rating
Shelved in 3 Libraries
Added on July 4, 2011
Last Updated on August 9, 2011
Tags: mermaid

Author

Viki Rachel
Viki Rachel

Dallas, TX



About
~~I WILL NOT ADD YOU WITHOUT PRIOR CONTACT~~ I don't take RRs. I check up on all of my friends and review their poems, stories, and sometimes books. I don't expect reviews in return, however they are.. more..

Writing
Skin Skin

A Story by Viki Rachel



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Toenails Toenails

A Poem by drivebypoet