Invisible

You say "Hi" to my friends and left me out

Don't even know what I'm all about

Ignorance is the way you are

Shut the door, left me in the dark

It's been a year and you don't even know my name

Not a clue nor a hint, what a shame

Felt like someone's shadow

I am there but always hollow

Can't you see what you did to me?

I felt like I was losing my visibility

I was there but no one saw

Seemed to throw my one last straw

Your careless actions spoke enough

You buried yourself with your foolish laugh

I'm still a person with a fragile heart

And you broke it, shattered it apart

Invisible is what I am to you

Can't you just notice, at least see me through?

I have feelings and they hurt

It's like you dusted me off like dirt 

-Ysabel (24 Dec 2011)

Reviews

[stars are far]

I loved this so much and how you blowed you anger in a nice way..
Hey ..i think that the one that diesnt see you dont even give a look because who doesnt look at you is a person that doesnt deserve you look..
Keep that amazing work seen ;-)

~Stars are far~

[Ripple of Aqua]

His is such a relatable work that it makes me want to shout with you. Invigorating.

[Gabriel Firebrand]

Nice poem, Ysa! :) I really like it. It appeals to almost every type of person, who've been shunned at one point or another. It's a great poem. :D

[Cassie Fraga]

mmmm... I hear it!! yes... no better way to express then in lyrical rhyme, great job!!

[light and ashes]

Such a beautiful poem, your anger and hurt was felt in every line.

[paparapapa]

The first line definitely caught my attention. That must have hurt. :| Again, I loved the story beneath your words. And this poem really shows the hurt and depression that you are feeling. Although, there were some lines that didn't feel right, you were still able to convey the message wholly. Just some corrections... I think you meant "hollow" not "hallow." And "shattered" not "shuttered." Thanks for sharing this lovely poem. Keep on writing. ;)

[Tai Ryens]

Both anger and sadness flow through the poem with ease. Nice job with the lines too, you pulled them off quite nicely. One problem though, the rhyme scheme was fine, but two lines didn't come together quite nicely.
"Felt like someone's shadow, I am there but always hallow."
This was a nice try, but it can confuse some readers, since 'shadow' and 'hallow' don't rhyme quite nicely in some people's opinions.
"Your careless actions spoke enough, You buried yourself with your foolish laugh"
Again, the two words don't rhyme nicely.
Despite those two flaws, the poem came together perfectly. Emotions are strong. Nice poem.

[Etoiles]

I like this, it's got great rhythm.
Seemed to end a bit abruptly though, I would've liked to read more.
:)

[yukiderp]

i love this because i feel like i can connect with it completely. i'm actually going through the exact same situation. so your feelings really have reached me. great job on this.