The Deadliest Trio

Its a poem on the sins I believe to be the worse. Lust Pride and Wrath.

1. Lust

Its worse than treachery and unjust

This brutal sin is named as lust.

It eats a man bit by bit

In an unfair dangerous battle of wit

The man loses all morality 

To the overwhelming power of it.

There is no possible salvation 

To the Savage's awful deed

In this society unharvested

His presence is nothing but of weed

On the judgment day of his unworthy life

His suffering is a must 

He'll face more agony than his victims

When drilled with burning rods of lust.

2. Wrath

As Impediment on harmony's path 

Is the furious sin named as wrath.

It blindfolds all what calm could see

Then however good the man may be

Anger makes him a furious beast

Friendships and relations are it's feast.

Anger and fury cause a lot of pain

For the victim and for the bane

Red as blood and hot as lava 

During the anguish he looks insane.

On the judgment day of his fiery life 

Placation is the only cure 

On slabs of ice his body lying 

The  chill will calm him for sure

3. Pride

When humility and modesty step aside 

A sin is born and named as pride.

Respect is something one can only earn 

But the infected ones do never learn 

Oppressors they are and demand respect 

For respect pride just makes them yearn.

Pride hits one in many ways

Of money, beauty, strength and grace

It takes away every chance to prosper 

makes one complacent for future days.

On the judgment day of his proud life

He would surely end up a disgrace 

When the humble ones would eat and enjoy 

He would pick their dirt and wash the place.

Author's Note

I like writing poems and I want to learn more to write better.
Your reviews would help me a lot.
Thank You.

Reviews

[Bear]

Other than your changing rhyming pattern this is another well constructed poem, it has good philosophical depth and as Coyote said and I quote " The deadly sins are a good topic to write upon". You are already a smart writer and I am sure you will only improve with age and experience, I look forward to watching and reading how your work changes over time. Thank you for the joyride.

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good description of the three deadly sins. The deadly sins are a good topic to write upon. You wrote a short paragraph for them. Each one could be a long story. Lusts, wrath and pride. These three can leave us swimming in bad places with poor endings. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry. You could expand each part with real life tales.
Coyote

[Yusuf Qaizar]

Thank you for that idea I would surely work on that.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[nazia]

Your description of lust is what I liked the best here. A bit more imagery could be used.