Behind My Eyes

This comes from a dream that has been haunting me the past few nights from a great unlce who has passed away.

Every time I close my eyes, I see him

He moves his mouth

As if to say something

But I cannot hear him

Where his eyes would be

I see nothing, only darkness

It's like looking into a black hole

His face isn’t peaceful as it should be, only filled with pain

Even as I open my eyes, that picture

Of his restless soul still haunts my memory

He points his hand off into the night

And I can only sit and wonder

What is he trying to show me?

Reviews

[alexlessah]

makes you wonder a lot afterwards, but i really like it

[SilentDreamer]

Hmm. This peice caught my attention as soon as I read the title. It does make you wonder and think. Great visualization too.

[Calypso]

It does leave you wondering.

[Nicole]

makes me think of this ghostly spirit that is trying to talk to me but i cant understand what the spirit is saying

[Sarah McConnaughey]

This is great! Definitely makes you think and wonder what he's pointing at. Might be sinister, innocent, happy, sad... Amazing poem! :)

[KAREN]

Excellent write! Sad and and the imagery is great!

[felioness]

very haunting...ambiguously so ...one could wander in several directions with this write.

[Poetic Beauty]

This makes me think of someone who has lost a loved one to a tragic accident or illness and those painful moments are captured overflowing into the dream realm. I love the details and the open ending.

[Peter Green]

This is great...wonderful imagery...haunting...an image at one time or another we have all seen, in our dreams, or in our creative minds. So...yeah...you got me hooked...you asked the question...'What is he trying to show me?'...are ya gonna show me...the reader...or are you gonna leave me hangin here?...Like a monkey in a tree, scratching my arm pit? There's a secret here...I think you know it...