The Royals vs the poet's realms

The Royals vs the poet's realms

A Poem by S.zaynab.kamoonpury
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Appreciating the kingdom of poets

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Of splendid thrones of gold
or treasures manifold

Of jewelled caskets
or lavish banquets

Of Emirs and rajahs
Of Sultan and Shahs

Of kings and queens
Of rulers and emperors

Of sparkling crowns
or flowing gowns

Of their subservient stewards and obedient pages
Of their stalwart squires and servile knaves

Of poor humble, docile minions
who tended to regal pavilions
And obeisantly carried royal palanquins
Oh and some were real life harlequins

Of castles and palaces
of abounding gold and silver
in ostentatious regal splendour

The sidelined fanning maids in waiting
Yet to me only one thing worth noticing
The minstrels who came to sing
from afar for the queen and king

For I'd rather be a poetess for kings
so to my tunes swayed a kingdom
than I be the king of mere subjects
and be filled with regal boredom!

So I could join ranks of
troubadours
and sing for the king
some folklores.

© 2018 S.zaynab.kamoonpury



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The difference of royals in poets, maybe they are powerful as a ruler, but poets can be a powerful too in words

Posted 2 Months Ago


"For I'd rather be a poetess for kings
so to my tunes swayed a kingdom
than I be the king of mere subjects
and be filled with regal boredom!

So I could join ranks of
troubadours
and sing for the king
some folklores."

First of all, I loved the title of the poem 'The Royals vs The Poet's Realms'. Your poem depicts your internal feelings about poetry and it's world. You can just reject all the materialistic elements for poems. Well penned!

Posted 5 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

5 Months Ago

Yes u got it young poet. Thanks.
Raj Sahu

5 Months Ago

The pleasure is only mine.
Well written Zaynab. I really enjoyed the rich language and composition in this poem which talks of values and those who have all the wealth and those who have nothing. That's the world of the past, the world of today and without doubt the world of the future. Nothing changes. So good to meet you on here.

Posted 5 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

5 Months Ago

Oh pal sory couldn't come earlier, busy life ah. Yes it's great to meet u here dear. I enjoyed your .. read more
"The Royals vs the poet's realm"
S.zaynab Kamoonpury,
Lovely phrasing which lends itself to the theme of those in posh surroundings and those working hard but happy in there craft of creation. I felt that this even told a story of not becoming out of touch with certain groups of humanity. Our earth is such a wide swath of 'everyone.' I am sure it is true where you are from as well maybe even more so. I appreciated your rhythmic almost sing-song lyrical poem.
Blessings and nice to meet you,
kathy

Posted 5 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

5 Months Ago

And I like how u summed and added to it. Such diversity on this planet yeahhh. Everywhere there's ro.. read more
Kathy Van Kurin

5 Months Ago

Yes, and It looks like you have ten people in your friends box.You will not let me forget. That's p.. read more
Ah, Dear Zaynab,
I would like to extend a warm and joyous welcome to the Writers' Café. Sincerely, I wish for you to like it here and stay with us, to make fine friends and attract many fans, and to learn much about our craft from some wonderfully gifted poetesses, poets, and author/writers.
In this, your first offering, you've blessed us with an original variety of unmetered poetic genre, spot-on and near rhymes, and with metaphoric syntax, gifted us a great message of life's true values and treasures, where they are most likely to be found, and where they are not.
In America, if one works hard, becomes skilled enough, publicizes and promotes their poetic
compositions correctly, they may be both rich and a successfully happy poetess or poet, knowing the best of both worlds at the same time, but even as an American, your wise and valuably valid message is not lost on me; for, if a choice I must make, a happy, poor, free-spirited poet I would choose a thousand times over royalty and riches.
As a long-tenured teacher of poetry, poetically-speaking in critique of this piece, a closer meter between lines would make it read more smoothly and enjoyably for more readers, with a more consistent rhyme-scheme, and having said all that, none of it would make your message any clearer to me … all of it would only improve your poetical skills, allowing this to be the original, virtual masterpiece I think it deserves to be.
If you find value in my words, I will always be thrilled to offer my hand at anytime, about anything poetical you might wish of me.

Again, "Welcome, Zaynab!" : )
I love both the spirit of this beautiful piece from your heart and mind, and most assuredly, the invaluable message … big hugs! ⁓ Richard 🌸

(PS: Don't worry, all my reviews won't be a book … LOL!)

Posted 5 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

5 Months Ago

Thanx so much for your great constructive criticism, I like the longer the better, I like the human .. read more
Richard

5 Months Ago

I'm enjoying you. : )
all the money and luxuries in the world could not sway me from writing...it is my breath. I relate to this muchly...the kings and queens worry...we sing with words...I like the use of slant rhyme in this piece.

Posted 5 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

5 Months Ago

Thanx soo much for supporting and favouring poets and poetry rather than royalty like a few naughty.. read more
Royalty for me everyday ... don't think i would be bored lol

Posted 5 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

5 Months Ago

Aha so u can enjoy your wish poetically or maybe u can enjoy some royalty in afterlife like I hope l.. read more
well written and well appreciated too.

Posted 7 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

7 Months Ago

Warm thanx poetess sette.
sette

7 Months Ago

thanks too my friend
Well written. I like your use of words. And I love the last line, 'sing for the King, some folklores.' Was this a deliberate play on the word 'law'? And I too would much rather have a kingdom of poetry, that the glam and sham, of the higher echelons. good poem.


Posted 8 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

8 Months Ago

Yay lets drink some honey sherbet to the kingdom of poetry. I like how u phrased it wow. And yes I s.. read more
Excellent poem! I like the freedom and emotion you chose to express being a poet. I honestly feel like your feelings through a poem can impact many kinds of people if you want it to. Keep up the nice work! :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

8 Months Ago

Thanx much for comment, glad it can mean to all sorts.

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