The Written Soul

I cut my soul, and watch it bleed

All the hatred and anger flows out of me

There is no try, for me to succeed

I need the calm, for me to be.

 

I pass the test, for me to climb

To another place, somewhere else in time

To Mr Blood and Mrs Bleed

It's time to take over the life

Once meant for me

Until i die, no rest in peace

Immortal life, the written soul

 

I think it time, I think it's right

To take a chance on the bottom line

I'll give it all, to show the world

The steps I take, aren't untraceable

 

I be your voice, on a dreary night

I'll be the bearer of all miss matched might

To Mr Blood and Mrs Bleed

It's time to take over the life

Once meant for me

For we are young, and meant to stray

Immortal life, the written soul

 

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solo

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To Mr Blood and Mrs Bleed

It's time to take over the life

Once meant for me

I free my mind, and let it soar

Immortal life, the written soul

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

I be your voice, on a dreary night
I'll be the bearer of all miss matched might

this part sticks with me - not sure why.

[Sarah Greaton]

Very excellent writing. I enjoyed it very much! Keep on writing! That talent must be used! Must be seen! Keep it up! :)

~Sarah

[Arabdha]

this has a very good flow..and yeah i agree with the others..it would make a good song..good job!

[Spit_and_Prayers]

I generally like the flow of this piece, it possesses good rhythm, and the constant repetition of theme works well here. I would suggest playing around with so alterations and seeing how they sound "Ms." to "Mrs." (also interesting motif change their, the lines I'll be the bearer of all miss matched might and The steps I take, aren't untraceable somewhat break the rhythm, though if you stick with Ms. I like the tie in to miss matched.

[Closed Account]

Would be cool to hear this set to music. Lemme know if you want me to try.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Love the title and its repetition in the lyrics. Nicely spun.
Light,
Siddartha

[Janice Ann]

Now, at first read this is a song about suicide. And it made me cry but then I sang it to melody in my head it turned into something new, like a mistake you can't undo. Wonderfully written!

[Sami Liam]

Awes, love it. I only caught a few mistakes. I should be capitalized in stanza two. "Mr Blood and Ms Bleed" should be "Mr. Blood and Ms. Bleed". Otherwise, awesome song/poem. It's nice, and it's really great :)

Sami