I know it. She knows it. You know?

I know it. She knows it. You know?

A Poem by [KL]
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You know? [M] Based on a conversation I had today.. All wording is practically how the person said it. So.. Yeah. I kinda turned it into a poem.. Well.. Tried to anyway.

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She says alotta things about me.
Because I don’t say a lot back.
I say it, she says it.
And she says I say it.
I say she says I say it.
And I say she says that
She says that I say she says
That I say it. ‘Cause that’s what
I say.

And the reason she does this is
Because she benefits from it.
And I know it, she knows it,
And she knows that I know it.
I know she knows that I know,
And I know she knows and
She knows I know that she knows
That I know it. ‘Cause she knows.
You know?

At least that’s what I think,
Because we are so alike.
And I think that, she thinks that.
And she thinks I think that.
I think she thinks that I think that.
And I think she thinks that.
She thinks that I think she thinks
That I think that. ‘Cause that’s how
She thinks.

I know it, She knows it,
You know?
‘Cause that’s just how
We think.
I think it, She thinks it,
You know?
‘Cause that’s just what
We say.
Say, think and know alike,
You know?

© 2010 [KL]


Author's Note

[KL]
Took me ages to get the syllables on each line to similar values... Had to use enjambment for once! I think it's rather good ;)
Please review it! Don't just view it! :L
[M]
Once Again edited.. In an attempt to make it seem a little less confusing (:

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You worked the form that you chose very well here. I admit I'm kinda tired so hearing all that repetition was a little overwhelming, but I think after a good cup of coffee this would be rather enjoyable. What I really like about this is that it seems like a conversation, maybe someone frazzled.

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I love the "voice" in this piece. I want to hear it spoken because I think it would have better flavor than the voice in my head when I'm reading it. Not to mention, it might help to not read this at 4 in the morning... Ha. :]

I dig the style and the believable-ness of this piece. Pretty sure everyone has had something sort of like this 'relationship.' Excellent writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


You worked the form that you chose very well here. I admit I'm kinda tired so hearing all that repetition was a little overwhelming, but I think after a good cup of coffee this would be rather enjoyable. What I really like about this is that it seems like a conversation, maybe someone frazzled.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow what great work I love it you truely do have the knack my friend

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Thats so cool XD

Posted 13 Years Ago


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it awsome i know what u mean i think i know where u goin whit it and is awsome
a lil confusin but that the fun part

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I like this man you should rap this

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I liked this piece quite a bit. Good rhythm and a light message I think everyone can relate to. The only criticism I would offer would be the last two lines. Perhaps if I heard it aloud it would make it work, but to read it it just doesn't seem to flow like the rest of it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, very interesting write. At first I was confused, but then it made sense as I kept reading. Great talent put into this. Nice job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Lol I got confused at the beginning and the end. But I caught on!! =P Great piece though! Keep it up :-)

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Get to read the final piece I must say. Good piece, very different. Clear to understand, to me anyway, and well written. Well done. :)

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

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