His Mansion

The faucet oozed tears, red like blood

Swamping the grease stained sink

Washing white porcelain and marbled tiles

Blood dripped and plates shattered

All across the bathroom floor

In the corridor swung a man

Pale in face and cold in flesh

Silk clothes are interchanged with burlap

Broken windows glistened with sunlight and red

A chandelier swayed in the changing breeze

Beneath it sat another man

His hands rough with work and poverty

His soul rough with anger

Upon his chest he bore a suit of silk and gold

And there he sat above it all

Spilled champagne and blood alike

Atop a pile of bums and beggars

Friends who he killed to reach the top

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

I know its kind of rough. Suggestions?

Reviews

[K.G]

Make it a bit more flowy with its agrressive yet detailed manner. Speaking of details, maybe add more? Other then that, I love it!

[Richard]

There must be something in the water in Rhode Island ... that was fantastic
I've read a lot of RI writers now .. well a few and all very talented that was great :)

Richie

[Jesse Jacques]

wwhoooooaaaa

[Grace Catherine C.]

I love it!

[Brandon S. Whitten]

An excellent read and write.

[Alexa Tasch]

Thanks!

[Rob Santana]

hahahahahahaha, you jus keep gettin' better in your dark writing!!!! F****n brutal!!!! I love it!!! Not rough brutal and awesome!!! "Swamping the grease stained sink" damn, clever wording. Write what you feel Alexa, don't hold back!! You never know what brilliant piece will be born. As soon as my internet is fixed I'm gonna shelve this one. HELLUVA JOB, WELL DONE!!!!!

[Alexa Tasch]

aw! Thanks so much!

[PurpleQuartz]

Wow there's a pretty cool dark and eerie feeling that comes with this poem! You did another great write!!

[Alexa Tasch]

Thanks!

[C.C. Marx]

Oh geez Alexa back to the blood and gore again? I swear one of these days in getting nightmares haha overall nice job

[Alexa Tasch]

*gasp!!!!!* C.C.!!!! You're not dead!!!!

[C.C. Marx]

Nope I'm perfectly alive....I think

[Alexa Tasch]

yay!! *flailing arms*

[C.C. Marx]

*fails arms and runs in circles* I love living

[Alexa Tasch]

I love flailing :P

[C.C. Marx]

Lets fail of a cliff and see if we fly

[Alexa Tasch]

yes! I think we would

[C.C. Marx]

I do too I mean I can flail pretty fast

[Alexa Tasch]

lol you'd have to

[C.C. Marx]

Or maybe I like falling that's fun to

[Alexa Tasch]

but then you'd die!!

[C.C. Marx]

Nah cuz I bounce.....like a bumble :p

[Alexa Tasch]

.....really? Christmas reference? In April?

[C.C. Marx]

Ummmm....enjoy me?

[Alexa Tasch]

no! Bad C.C.! NO christmas in april!

[C.C. Marx]

WHY NOT I LIKE CHRISTMAS AND PRESENTS

[Alexa Tasch]

i like them too, IN THE WINTER

[C.C. Marx]

I would find it fantastic YEAR ROUND

[Alexa Tasch]

maybe the gifts would be cool, but not the cheery happy singing santa getting together with your relatives that you hate part

[C.C. Marx]

If I hate them, chances are we don't invite them over for Christmas nope that's on Easter

[Alexa Tasch]

well that sounds like it'd work

[C.C. Marx]

Yep it's usually the people on my moms side that I can't stand ughh my stupid rich cousins

[Alexa Tasch]

but you have to be nice to the rich people so they buy you things lol

[C.C. Marx]

No I don't, they are like my third cousins are they Won't buy me anything so I don't like them and their bragging

[Alexa Tasch]

they sound like loosers

[C.C. Marx]

Yep I try not to socialize with them the boy is my age and he goes to "one of the most prestigious schools New England has to offer" his words

[Alexa Tasch]

its just new england. our schools aren't that special

[C.C. Marx]

I know and the fact I live in a small town that doesn't even have a hockey team and their school has squash like what the hell is that

[Alexa Tasch]

squash?

[C.C. Marx]

It's a "sport" but I couldn't explain it to u if I tried

[Alexa Tasch]

It sounds made up

[C.C. Marx]

That's what I though!! OMG the bombs have me sick to my stomach, my favorite English teacher ever was running that and my brothers friends mom

[Alexa Tasch]

omg! That's horrible! That was so terrible!

[C.C. Marx]

It's just awful I still can't believe it

[Alexa Tasch]

My grandparents almost went to it, but turned around because they left the gas stove on. Thank goodness

[C.C. Marx]

Wow I'm glad they didn't go too!!! And to think I was gonna go there yesterday

[Alexa Tasch]

ooh wow! But most of the place is still closed down

[C.C. Marx]

I know that's why I didn't go, I wanted to though I guess another time

[Alexa Tasch]

therer's always summer vacation

[Akashi]

It's nice... I wish I knew him... he'd be my real best friend.... *SIGH*

[Alexa Tasch]

...but he killed his friends to be rich....

[Akashi]

Oh, change that thought, I wouldn't want to be his friend.

[Alexa Tasch]

lol yeah I thought that might be a little weird

[Akashi]

Yeah. I don't really know any rich people.

[Alexa Tasch]

me either

[Akashi]

Oh wait, I do. My uncle.