FACE DROPS!

It's a poem about a girl's fear of never getting into a lasting relationship,and ending up with shattered romance.

Once upon a time I met you
Twice upon a time we did fade
Got a song in my heart that's always new
Cause the lyrics change and it gets nude
Face drope,face drop,I always watch your face drop

I do not forget the moments
Just that I like to let go of it all
So life would feel like fresh mints
Don't want to obsess then go fall
Face drop, face drop,I always watch your face drop

I know I got fickle feelings
I always end up in different tragedies
I can't watch you change the melodies
I would rather see you come knelling
Face drop, face drop,I just always want see to see your face drop
I just always watch your face drop!

Author's Note

What do you think about this poem??

Reviews

[Ellie Fitchet]

This is really good. I love the first two lines especially.

[a_natural]

Thanks for your review, really helpful, and am glad you like it.

[Warren Daniel II]

I really enjoyed this poem, I think you had the most perfect introduction which hooks the reader in. The first two lines are absolutely beautiful. "I always end up in different tragedies" is my favorite line. Good Job.

[a_natural]

Thanks for your review, am glad you liked it☺☺ your comments are inspiring.

[ocean_side]

Interesting, the way it's structured the perspective could be from either the girl who sees her romance fall, or from a close confidant that's always there to see the shattered pieces.

Think in the first stanza, last line you accidentally added "e" to "drop" the first time. That aside it looks good.

Really good piece.

[a_natural]

Thanks for reading and your inspiring comments, am glad you liked it☺