Julian

Julian

A Poem by Aaliyah Davison
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This poem has deep meaning, and was composed to express the feeling of emptiness when someone you "love" cannot love you in return.

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The faint beating
Of my heart
Deep beneath my 
Soul

My mind is flustered
With your 
Words &
Precious face

Te quiero mucho
Is what you said
I like you
Is what you said
I want to be intimate 
Is what you said

Your eyes are beautiful
Is what you said

Realization of 
What the future holds

Reclusive teardrops
Buried and hidden
Inside the
Pillows, t-shirts,
Blankets, and rags

Emptiness overcomes
Gazing at the ceiling
At your face
Somewhere

A dream
So vacant
So intangible 

The vehemence of your
Virtual and urging love
My dear

Inaudibly assembled
Contemplating the future
Naught to come
Waiting for you
Fundamentally paused

Washed out viewpoint
Exhibit the truth
But still remaining
Upon them
Mi amor still coexists 

Romance
They say

Love is never simplified

Siempre te
Quiero
Mucho mucho
Mi amor

Sustaining like 
A ghost
Composing my life
Hormonal limits
Exceed the norm
Endeavor to feel you
To keep you in the vicinity
Of my warmth

I acknowledge
But cannot comprehend
Your mindset and duplicity 
Lovingly apologizing 
For the damage
Soulfully rooted
And engraved upon my heart

Failing once again
But never a day
Without loving you
Endlessly
With missing you dearly

Though our future has 
Crumbled 
It lie on the floor, cold
Like the paralyzed opossum
Attempting not to 
Get lured
Into your
Untouchable love

Siempre te
Quiero
Mi amor
But I know you love
Others
Maybe more

A piece of my heart
A piece of me
A thought of you

Beneath the barrier
Lies something true
Yet so complex
Deceived I am

To open my heart
You say
May be sweet

To you
I say
I have died
And have lost the key
To the piece of my heart
That you still seem to possess
But will never understand why

I miss you
I cannot grasp you
Never will
I ever

Which is why
My sentences
Tend to be thorough
Expressing punctuation 
Yet distant
Trying not to descend 
In this undeniable trap
You have set
But created by your 
Appreciation

Te quiero
You say
I like you
You say
I cannot be with you
You say

© 2016 Aaliyah Davison



Author's Note

Aaliyah Davison
Can I get any commentary on this piece? It is my very first meaningful poem to me, and I will cherish it forever. Any thoughts on how I worded my stanzas? It is a free verse poem, so the lines and stanzas flow via my heart.

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It seems it is all over. Words and promises still resonate in your heart. But all that is left now is a memory of things that are no more.
I can understand why you cherish this poem. It is the remaining link to what you had shared. This poem reminds you of his promises and tells you that it is all over.
This poem has come from the depth of your heart.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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A amazing. I liked the addition of the Spanish language.
"A piece of my heart
A piece of me
A thought of you"
The above lines is a need for the all of us. We need someone to be the one who loved us with all their heart. Even if it is for a New York minute. Thank you Aaliyah for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


Aaliyah Davison

1 Year Ago

And I thank you for your amazing review :)
Aaliyah
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome Aaliyah.
this is something good. nice write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Aaliyah Davison

1 Year Ago

Thank ya thank ya.
:)
It seems it is all over. Words and promises still resonate in your heart. But all that is left now is a memory of things that are no more.
I can understand why you cherish this poem. It is the remaining link to what you had shared. This poem reminds you of his promises and tells you that it is all over.
This poem has come from the depth of your heart.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

falling that hard shatters the soul...you must remember to gather all of the pieces ...nice writing :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aaliyah Davison

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Terry. I appreciate your review.
terry smith

1 Year Ago

sure thing :)........
I like that line about the paralyzed opossum.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aaliyah Davison

1 Year Ago

Thank you @WacondaSprings ... I do too.
It is very long poem.... But intention is so clear that is good thing and necessary for a poem. It looks like a conversation between two persons but rather like an answer to what you have observed in someone, who have deep feeling and emotion for you. It also tells a story in which you want clarity form someone, who always says you..... “I love you, I like you, or you are my life etc.” ..... It is so inspirational and interesting for me because the story worded in this poem relates to my story. The other things that I have observed in this poem are that... It is filled with honest emotions and feelings that are key stones in true love.... It also looks like a melody song..... and Spanish words that you have written are so beautiful... I am singing it right now...
I really love it and touched my heart.... Thank you, Aaliyah, for sharing this lovely piece.... Keep writing..... I will look forward other writings from you....

Best
SZHZIA

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aaliyah Davison

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much, SZHZIA, in return. This piece is so special to me, and it makes me smile that so.. read more
SZHZIA

1 Year Ago

It is my pleasure...

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Added on April 3, 2016
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