I feel you

I feel you

A Poem by Jodash

I feel you near
In every instance
In a wild flower,
Beautiful

Or a soaring bird
Spiritual

The warmth of sun
or the cool breeze
against my skin
So physical

Even when I forget,
It remains true
your love will always
be there

© 2023 Jodash


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Love the simplicity. The three rhymes work together and my favorite lines are “In a wild flower,/Beautiful”.

Did you mean to put two full stops after “true”? I believe an ellipsis is three. I will say that I think the ellipsis would work better after “always”, but that’s just a suggestion. I’m no expert.

I especially like your word choice with “instance” and “soaring bird/ Spiritual”.

I enjoyed reading this!


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jodash

5 Years Ago

Thank you Rose for your thoughts on this poem and your suggestions. Yes you're right it should be th.. read more
H L Rose

5 Years Ago

Of course! I’m glad!
ochechi

4 Years Ago

Hi nice work here



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Some love will remain forever for true love never dies- wonderful words🌹

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jodash

4 Years Ago

Hi! Thanks for the double review ;) it's a pleasure to read them. Feel free to check out some of my .. read more
‘Thoughts In Time’🌹

4 Years Ago

Pleasure - good weekend to u as well🌹
Beautiful- when you feel two as one- wonderful words of love🌹

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sounds like one of many times I could see my purpose in a wild flower or feel the life around me. The very touch of the still air around me laid on skin like the feel of satin blowing in a soft breeze. I felt him inside and out and when I'd forget he'd call my name. In these times I also felt mostly loved mainly because I may have stepped away long enough to forget but his love wouldn't allow me to go long enough to forget his voice or far enough to not be able hear it. I very Spiritual experience. You're blessed to see his love in the way that you do. Thank you

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jodash

4 Months Ago

Thank you for this wonderful review Babbette
Such personal realizations about relationship. Yes there is an abiding presence, a near and dearness about a true love that simply exists. There are moments one awakes to the presence of the other while contemplating natural beauty or reflecting in shere awe. Thanks for opening me to these moments.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jodash

5 Years Ago

Very much appreciate and enjoyed reading your review. It was a special feeling that came over me fr.. read more
Love the simplicity. The three rhymes work together and my favorite lines are “In a wild flower,/Beautiful”.

Did you mean to put two full stops after “true”? I believe an ellipsis is three. I will say that I think the ellipsis would work better after “always”, but that’s just a suggestion. I’m no expert.

I especially like your word choice with “instance” and “soaring bird/ Spiritual”.

I enjoyed reading this!


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jodash

5 Years Ago

Thank you Rose for your thoughts on this poem and your suggestions. Yes you're right it should be th.. read more
H L Rose

5 Years Ago

Of course! I’m glad!
ochechi

4 Years Ago

Hi nice work here
Its a beautiful thing! Nicely written!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jodash

5 Years Ago

Thank you Donna
This is gorgeous indeed. Very powerful and effective.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jodash

5 Years Ago

Thanks Sami. I kinda like the way it turned out.
Sami Khalil

5 Years Ago

Yep. You are welcome...
Beautiful poem it was very well written.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jodash

5 Years Ago

Thanks... I appreciate that
Sometimes a memory takes residence in our heart. I loved how you expressed that with so little!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jodash

5 Years Ago

Thanks Kelly
there are always reminders everywhere, and if you find that you miss a few then you look inwardly to know what is true. I enjoyed this

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jodash

5 Years Ago

Thanks. I saw this flower today, took a pic and got inspired. Glad you enjoyed. I also enjoyed readi.. read more
Papaya

5 Years Ago

You're welcome :)

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Added on April 23, 2018
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