NYC Dreams

This is pretty much a poem about New York City. Its highs and lows and trying to be set apart from it in order to have the kind of peace and stillness that the city itself lacks.

Melting pot, melting pot

Put me to sleep

Here on the concrete

Allow me leave of absence

From your maleficent ambience

Latino’s in Spanish Harlem,

Jobless John in Bed-stuy,

Junkies on the West side,

Successful Nancy who 

Lives on Park, shops on Lex

and trudges upon my concrete

Put me to sleep

Anoint my dreams 

with vignettes of peace.

Let me have this 

and when I wake,

Melting pot,

I’ll fight to breathe again

Author's Note

How can I make this better and really emphasize the contrasts in the poem? Also comments on it's structure would be really appreciated

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

O.K., this is just suggestion, do with it as you wish.

Melting pot, melting pot
Put me to slumber
Trust me leave of absence
From your maleficent ambience
That judges guilt not innocence.
Makes no sense!
put me to sleep
Latino’s in Spanish Harlem
Homeless John in bed-stuy
Junkies on the West side
Successful Polly who
Lives on Park and shops on Lex
Put me to sleep
Anoint thy dreams
with vignettes of peace.
Let me have this
and when I shudder,
Melting pot,
I’ll be yours again