Waiting

Waiting

A Poem by adriana

I sat outside in the rain today
Right in front of my garden
And my beautiful flowers
Their colors looked almost as sad as me

My clothes were heavy and my body grew cold
But I stayed put
I didn't move

My eyes wandered the empty neighborhood
The empty parking space in front of my lawn
The same one you used to park in

I was slowly drowning
In all the silence the rain was giving me
But I stayed put
I didn't move

No cars drove by
And no people walked past
I was alone
Just me and the rain
And the silence

But I didn't move
I stayed put
Because I was hoping
That one day

You would come back

© 2018 adriana



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A wonderful piece of poetry. I enjoyed! Keep watching for your rose to bloom:)

Posted 6 Months Ago


Isn't it crazy how absence can seem so powerful a force. And its only worsened by the fact that nothing but you seems to notice it.

Posted 6 Months Ago


That is a unique poem expressing the hopefulness and faithfulness of love.
I like how you repeat the phrase 'I didn't move', expressing your patience in love.
I love the imagery of daily life, such as the neighbourhood, the car park, the rain,
to associate your loving longing and feeling.

WELL DONE

Posted 6 Months Ago


adriana

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words! I’m glad you enjoyed it
Don’t waste your life waiting on someone who doesn’t want you. It’s not worth it. I know it hurts but if they came back it would never be the same. You would always wonder if they would leave again. Nice write though.

Posted 6 Months Ago


adriana

6 Months Ago

I’m not heartbroken, I just like writing sad stuff. Thank you

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Added on March 4, 2018
Last Updated on March 5, 2018
Tags: closure, heartbreak, love, sad, Rain

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adriana
adriana

santa ana , CA



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I'm just a 19 year old who loves to write. I enjoy getting inspiration from songs or everyday occurrences. I tend to write in sad tones and its something I have made a part of myself. I try to put hea.. more..

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