This will be a Beautiful Death

This will be a beautiful death -

 

The fragile snow is beneath

my toes, freezing the insides,

the cold swirling and twirling up my legs,

tickling my veins and morphing the blue

blood purple, shaking the scraggly routes

back to my blackened heart.

 

I want to take a step onto the pond,

the pond Jack Frost has painted over

with foggy glass, hiding the dark

waters beneath it.

 

My body moans as my leg lifts,

as I walk, as I stare

steadfastly ahead.

 

I am shaking.

I am freezing.

I am frozen.

 

I think of your lips on my neck,

and the black and purple inside of me

begin to groan, for my mind melts into

reds and yellows and oranges,

warmth -

 

I step towards the ice.

My body screams in protest.

The black and purple blood cheer.

I think of you.

Red. Orange. Yellow.

Your kiss.

I love you.

I jump.

Author's Note

This is pretty dark. If you listen to Kanye West, that's where I got the line "This will be a beautiful death" and a vision - or idea - I had the moment I listened to the line. Any feedback is welcome.

Reviews

[E.H. Monroe]

The changes of dark uninviting colors, the colors of bruises are replaced by warm colors right before the death building to the beauty that you begin about.
A heart actually transforms into beams of light before death. Like the final release of pain.

Mind rocking work

[GTVile]

Now this is a really good work. Its painful, hope-extinguishing, and finite. You achieved the bleakness and darkness of extinguished life. Excellent job.

[Alice]

This is AMAZING.
I love:
I am shaking.
I am freezing.
I am frozen.

[Moflo]

Wow this was very descriptive and I liked it. Yes it was dark but you really got the emotion to the readers, I thought. Good job.

[LeNnY SuNsEt]

I'm impressed. I got that the second I read it -- Power. I love Kanye, he's a genius. I can see the flow and the darkness as you give suicide not only rhythm but a personality and clothe her, or should I say reveal her, graphically in a beautiful scene. I read it 3 times and it meant more every time as I'm sure a 4th time would add on more. It resonates its bitter cold and helplessness and, in contrast, its warmth as the spirit rejoices to soon be freed from its fleshly prison. Very colorful and spirited. Emotional piece. Excellent work.