I AM A GIFT

I AM A GIFT

A Poem by afra

I am that gift which was never opened

I am that treasure which was never discovered

I am that sun which was never seen

But in the sky it has always been


I am that heart that never got a chance to beat

I am that eye that never saw your face

I am that love who never felt your tears heat

But you don't want me in any case


I am that moon which never came

I am that star which never shine

After losing me you won't feel the same

You are throwing me away like a bottle of wine


I am that thing you don't want

You didn't give me a chance to call you ''mom''

I am the thing you want no more

I am unborn baby of yours


© 2012 afra



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It is a moving poem against abortion (and there are some real corking anti-abortion poems out there).

I thought I'd try my hand at a small response to yours.

I am that screwed up person who was planted with a baby.
My life spirals down the tube and I'll drag you there with me.
I resent you and I hate you, I wish you'd never come.
How many times must I say, NEVER call me mom.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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You put a lot of resentment against your mom or sombodies mom, I guess you have good reason based on your other poem and this one. However I am all against abortion to me its murder. Great job on the poem

Posted 5 Years Ago


Wow, this is a great POV piece that speaks strongly against abortion. Your imagery makes for the stark telling of loss.
Thank you for sharing it.

I only noticed this problem:
I am (the) unborn baby of yours

Very well done!

Posted 5 Years Ago


afra

5 Years Ago

thank you so much
beautiful love it keep writing

Posted 5 Years Ago


afra

5 Years Ago

thank you ...^-^
Maximillion

5 Years Ago

it really is beautiful
afra

5 Years Ago

awww
Wow, amazing as always, great pathos, I can really see your touch in this poem, could recognize the writer among thousands of other writers

Posted 5 Years Ago


afra

5 Years Ago

aww thanks
外人 (Gaijin)

5 Years Ago

just telling the truth ;)
afra

5 Years Ago

awwww
Beautiful and touching, and it has a perfect rhythm.
I'm sorry if you really feel this way.

Posted 5 Years Ago


afra

5 Years Ago

thank you
meaningful.. i'm totally in favor of the anti-abortion thing. the flow is really good.. kinda makes you sad, when you think from the point of view of a little aborted baby, ignoring the fact that an infant so small may not be able to think.. well done!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Whoa, this could've gone a few ways. I like how it ended up.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Very declarative. Eerily heart wrenching. Powerfully stated. This poem carries meaning.

Posted 5 Years Ago


This is very descriptive of an unborn baby's thoughts. I won't get into the politics here, just a great write on a sensitive subject. Third stanza, 2nd line, if you want to keep the rhyme, to be grammatically correct, "I am the star, that will never shine". And last line, "I am an unborn baby of yours." As usual, I have to gripe about punctuation! Use it, please!

Posted 5 Years Ago


this is really good also....it's so real and honest...amazing

Posted 5 Years Ago



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