You Left Me

Can be directed to many different people.

I miss you all the time;
It gets harder every day.
Everything happens for a reason,
But I still wish you could stay.

There are empty promises,
And many words unspoken.
But please do not,
Let our relationship be broken.

I'm not sure why you had to leave,
But it pains me every day.
No matter how long we are apart,
Promise you'll never forget me.

I want to be together,
Forever, you and me.
But now that you are gone,
I know this can never be.

Author's Note

I'm not so sure about this one to be honest.

Reviews

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Simply beautiful! I love the plea but at the end accepting as you said " can never be." There comes a point that we have to let go and accept it graciously in the matter you put it at the end. Thanks for sharing. Wonderful work it got my feelings into it. N.

[AmandaFuller]

Thank you so so much

[Nicole M.]

"There are empty promises,
And many words unspoken.
But please do not,
Let our relationship be broken."

Love these lines. It's a choice.

[AmandaFuller]

Yes. Thank you so much!!

[AmandaFuller]

I think changing "are gone" to "have left" would relate to the title more. But either sounds good.

[thaleeyaLuna]

This piece is painful, yet beautiful. It speaks of a love that's lost and can never again happen, proving the power of the inevitable. Nice work!

[AmandaFuller]

Thank you so so much!!

[T. Edana Talbott]

Honestly, this was so bittersweet. A beautifully woven piece on a love that can never be.

[AmandaFuller]

Thank you so, so much!!

[Cheryl]

It's beautiful. I guess it's related to the previous story. Keep writing :)

[AmandaFuller]

Thanks so much

[Gee]

Hi, for me the rhyme scheme was a wee bit off and missing altogether in verse 3, which threw me . Saying that, enjoyed the read

[AmandaFuller]

Thanks for the review, although I wasn't trying to rhyme really. I just wanted to put my feelings into a poem.

[PaintedBirdy]

overall i think this is a little vague and i can't tell what the relationship between the narrator and the other person is. why does the narrator miss this person? what was it about this other person? empty promises on which side and about what? why were words unspoken? adding details about any of these will make the poem deeper, more nuanced, and more meaningful. by not answering these (or other questions) it seems like their relationship really wasn't that special but that the narrator is expressing: i have a feeling of loss, and the more i feel that loss the more i want to fill it with the thing i lost. Even though the relationship wasn't that special, the narrator just doesn't want to feel the 'feeling of loss'.

also, "everything happens for a reason" is a very overused cliche, so i'd suggest you replace it with something more original or meaningful to the narrator.

[AmandaFuller]

I figured I would leave it vague so that the reader could maybe remember someone they lost, and they could fill in the answers to these questions. At least that is what I do when I read poetry. But thanks for the advice.

[kenza salmi]

touching !!! You really remind me of a so old story I had Hh , Well-done ...Even though forgetting is a hard task , but we have to do it ...We have to PUT our PRIDE fiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiirst ....Anyway, great work, like it so ..

[AmandaFuller]

Thank you!! I really appreciate you reviewing my work. I love poetry and having a meaning behind it. So thanks again for reviewing my writing!

[PaintedBirdy]

@AmandaFuller i thought it was a good poem too, and i think it is relatable if i wanted to put my own experiences into it, so i definitely appreciate that in your poem. my suggestions were merely because when i read i usually want to hear people's specific experiences and the details. i appreciate your style too, and i do think your writing is good!

[kenza salmi]

AmandaFuller ...No problem . I liked it so !

[AmandaFuller]

@MondaineGarcon thank you so much! I am glad you enjoyed it and I am so thankful you took the time to read my writing.