ONCE

a love poem

ONCE

 

once there was a glance

of quickening hearts

of time suspended

 

once there was a whisper

sweet secrets in my ear

to treasure

 

once there was a touch

soft caress upon my hand

lingering

 

once there was a kiss

crimson tide upon my yielding lip

bruising

 

once there was a word, or two, or more

of love, a rush,

a radiance

 

once there was a promise

of things yet  to come

of moments of wonder

 

once  …………

Reviews

[OneAmongstMany]

This is really quite beautiful, but the repetition of the word 'once' brings a certain sadness, as if these experiences are gone with the wind, existing only in memory. Indeed the word 'glance' in the first line perfectly encapsulates this: short, fleeting - but there nonetheless, never to fade from memory. At least that's what I took from it!

I really enjoyed this, thank you for sharing :)

[alanwgraham]

Yes that was what I suggested with the final once. I did have to explain to my wife that this was not a personal poem!
Regards
Alan

[Gee]

And then love becomes comfortable, expected, humdrum ( sometimes) but I personally wouldn't swap the love I have for the world..
Morning Alan, hope the rain is warm

[alanwgraham]

Thanks gee. Yes, love takes many forms. No rain here! We are on hon in the med. Sand sun and sangria!
Cheers, alan

[alanwgraham]

Thanks gee. Yes, love takes many forms. No rain here! We are on hol in the med. Sand sun and sangria!
Cheers, alan

[Gee]

Now I'm jealous. Have a great hol. Take care

[Duncan Brown]

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[alanwgraham]

Why bother with words! Time to show your face.

[Ken Simm.]

Excellent love poem Alan. A true creative's write.

[alanwgraham]

Thanks ken. Not my usual thing but Love poem are definitely the fashion in the cafe. Just joking!
Cheers,
Alan

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Such a beautiful love poem Alan. Tender, evocative, beautiful form, cadence, imagery. Haunting, echoing repetition of "Once"...each verse describing another nuance so eloquently. "Moments of wonder" are what your poem is filled with. Kudos!

[KCthelastboyscout]

You always remember the little things when you are with someone special and you don't have to close your eyes to do it.

[alanwgraham]

ThanksKC - what you say is very true. I suppose it is one of the strongest of human emotions and is certainly a great inspiration for writers.
Regards,
Alan

[GwenLark]

Beautifully written. I very much enjoyed this. Well done

[alanwgraham]

Thanks Gwen. This is not my usual but I started with 'once' and the rest followed.
Regards,
Alan

[Carcassonne]

A very nice rhythm and leaves off with a sense of mystery.. where did it all end up? You capture the wistful yearning of romance here beautifully.

[alanwgraham]

Thanks for reading and your kind comments. I guess most of us have had feeling like this!
regards,
Alan

[Saumya]

How wierdly interesting it is, that this 'once' doesn't remain the same forever , sigh*

You've beautifully described the fact that time never remains the same, and us so unpredictable!

Well done, Alan :)


-Saumya

[alanwgraham]

Thanks Sauma, What you've said is so true!
Regards,
Alan

[Saumya]

You're welcome Alan :)

Hope you've been doing fine? Sorry, I couldn't chit chat with you much. and review some of your writings before...I was both busy, and kinda forgot about all this before. :)

-Saumya

[alanwgraham]

I'm fine thanks. I had a spell when i couldn't write but things have looened again. That's it - life gets in the way.
Take care,
Alan

[Saumya]

Glad to know things are fine with you now :) time never remains the same yet life goes on anyway..That's how it is..And then we're just gotta go with the flow, maybe this is what makes life livable and interesting sometimes :)

Thanx & take care of you too:)
Saumya.

[G]

The emphasis of 'once' in the poem almost suggests that it happened one time and no more but the ending suggests unfinished business and that once is more a beginning than an end

Thought provoking, a relatable write

I enjoyed the read