The lost geese

The lost geese

A Poem by alanwgraham
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A sonnet, long laboured over!

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The lost geese



 

Each spring they walked beside the lakes and saw,

vast skeins of chattering geese obey the call,

age old, unplanned, to fly far north in thrall

to some past tale of land released from icy maw.

 

Long summer days of northern sun, the geese

grazed long, content on seed filled reed and grass,

evading stalk of arctic fox and falcon’s pass,

to celebrate the end of summers lease.

 

At autumn’s end, again they walked beside the lakes.

The youngster took his father’s hand and said,

‘the geese, they have not come, don’t say they’re dead.’

‘If they are lost, they’re lost for all our sakes!”

 

In lands far north the winter snows came late.

Too late, the geese flew south to meet their fate.

 


© 2018 alanwgraham



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Hello Alan, I know how difficult it is to write a sonnet, you have to be so disciplined, but I have to admit, once you've written one you do feel as though you have achieved something. This is quite lovely and the photograph you have posted of the geese in flight is so fitting. This is a delightful read. You get a pat on the back. Great work.

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alanwgraham

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks Christine. You are spot on - it was tough but also very satisfying.
Cheers,
Ala.. read more



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Hello Alan, I know how difficult it is to write a sonnet, you have to be so disciplined, but I have to admit, once you've written one you do feel as though you have achieved something. This is quite lovely and the photograph you have posted of the geese in flight is so fitting. This is a delightful read. You get a pat on the back. Great work.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

alanwgraham

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks Christine. You are spot on - it was tough but also very satisfying.
Cheers,
Ala.. read more
Nature cannot survive if the climate they have listened to for centuries has changed without notice. I've heard them fly over many times wondering where they go and their fate.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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alanwgraham

3 Weeks Ago

You are right - we are all under threat. We see them passing over all winter.
Thanks for read.. read more
Your photograph of these noble birds competing with a contrail for the sky is poetic in itself and a perfect accompaniment for the words to follow. I found this whole experience--the geese, their soldierly flight, their sad fate--to be a memorable heartbreak almost like war poetry.

Posted 2 Months Ago


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alanwgraham

2 Months Ago

Thanks for your very kind and 'eloquent' review. This is definitely not my typical writing - I wrote.. read more
Beautiful job! This is a surprising & satisfying style of poetry coming from you (usually not so lyrical or structured). I'm no expert on meter, which seems to be an essential part of a sonnet, but to me the rhythm of the reading seems right-on & the rhyming works well, too. The enjambment in stanza 2 is smoothly done. I love the vivid details of the natural settings & creatures. I'm not sure as to the cause of the demise of the geese, but I'm assuming it's related to climate change, so I'm in full agreement as to your meaning. Love the tones of melancholy thru-out, as our planet is changing & we are losing becuz of it (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


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alanwgraham

3 Months Ago

Thanks for your kind words Margie, You are quite right in spotting that this is much more convention.. read more
barleygirl

3 Months Ago

I took medication for my bipolar for 4 years, but decided to live with the drawbacks, in order to li.. read more
They are fascinating creatures. I remember watching a documentary on them not too long ago on their journey southward, but what you've penned here is truly a gorgeous sonnet, Alan! So touching, and I love the photo you chose to accompany it as well.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

alanwgraham

3 Months Ago

Thanks Kelly. I found the discipline of writing this tough but worth the effort. We see the geese f.. read more
Loved the story behind this poem, Alan, but was intrigued by this form of sonnet. I did lot of research and it appears to be more in the style of a rondel with the rhyming pattern. This is not intended as criticism, as this structure is more diffcult to maintain as you have to think "further ahead" when composing it.


Posted 4 Months Ago


Enjoyed this sonnet. When the subject is nature it is a hit with me! There are lessons in here, and the finish, flying south to meet their fate is exactly what I feel like doing today as it is -25C. Wonderful poem, cheers mate!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

alanwgraham

4 Months Ago

Thanks again Karen. This was written ages ago when I found it hard work to write this although meeti.. read more
Beautiful imagery. We live surrounded by Canadian geese here and other water fowl So vivid! Love your poem!

Posted 4 Months Ago


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alanwgraham

4 Months Ago

Thanks taino. We watch the geese flying over in their thousands each winter but we are putting it al.. read more
I absolutely adore the sentiment in this; especially the third stanza which is quite lovely.

One or two lines where the syllable count is not as it should be, (sorry, me just being a purist,) but strangely, aside from the word 'again' in line one stanza three, which is superfluous; the different counts, don't jar or overly interrupt the flow of what is a really excellent sonnet.

Beccy.

Posted 4 Months Ago


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alanwgraham

4 Months Ago

Thanks beccy and good writing in 2018! I did find the discipline of this tough and I will see if I c.. read more

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