In between the spaces

love poem (kind of)

 i want you to read this.

analyze it like you analyze me.

i want you to notice this.

every little detail.

the space between the words.

every single one is about you.

like everything else i do.

i want you to read this.

and think of me.

i want you to read this.

and put me in the spaces in your poetry.

let me live in between your thoughts.

let me be your muse.

i want you to read this.

and be graphic in your artistry.

you write in a way that offends my senses.

and i know,

i will never inspire that.

but i will try every chance i get.

i want you to read this.

and put me in your consonants.

put me in your vowels.

let me be the music.

that plays in the background while you write.

i want you to write me poems.

with lowercase letters.

and small soothing words.

and let me be the thought.

in between the spaces.

 

 

 

~amanda~

 

 

Author's Note

please ignore the lowercase letters. i wrote this one really quickly just now, and dont really feel like editing just yet. (im sure i will in the future)

Reviews

[Arthur Henn]

Smiling upon this....Amanda, you really got me going with this one as I like to write about romance and sensuality. The beauty that flows from within that soul of yous and what shows outside, how can one as myself not want to write you a poem.

This is my comment of a review right now. With your permission, I would like to have this dance of writing a poem of a comment to this.

Forewarning, no telling what I'll unearth from the heart of my soul :-)

Art

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concept and execution are superb. you follow through from beginning to end with the idea. i empathized with the voice and tone of the piece and imagine that many could; the vindication drips. sometimes it helps to drag someone through the pain you feel. great idea, good poem.

[misskara]

i love the lowercase - i usually write everything in lowercase, no punctuation. can be confusing to the reader, but it just pours out sometimes - like you said - it comes really quickly. plus - you ask to be written about in lowercase letters - so i think it works better with the content on the poem. i love the imagery of "putting me in your consonants, spaces, background music". i also really like the repeating line "i want you to read this" . i think it's brilliant. as i do most of your work.

:)

[Rachel DeHart]

I actually like it the way it is. :}
But then again, thats just the kinda poetry I write.

I really like these lines
"i want you to write me poems.
with lowercase letters.
and small soothing words.
and let me be the thought.
in between the spaces."

Though the whole poem is really cool.
Great read!

[Cece]

mmmm if i ignore lowercase letters
there is nothing to read
its all lowercase lol

ere poet wants their poetry read
you are so direct about it
as far as to say read between the lines

i want to know you
and know the space between
that space is you tat i read

highest praise is to use your poetry
as muse for their own poems
i wish some use my poems as well

[Cole Spire]

.... wow. If i didn't know any better i would think you were watching me from a window or something.

I know this poem wasn't about me, but the way you wrote it makes me feel like it was. This was a great poem and an awesome read. I definitly feel a little creeped out.

But in a good way

cole-

[Ocean Orchid]

An intelligent & skillful piece , but obviously with Poetic bliss .... u r a genuine writer.

[emmajoy]

This is so romantic and skilful and clever and.. and..

The way you've combined emotion with the craft of poetry is quite ingenuous - particularly the idea of you being the space between words, it's as if you want, no, need to be there in his writing and, therefore, his thoughts. As to being the background music.. yes, yes, yes!

Thank you, thank you for sharing, Amanda.

[JohnL]

Ignoring the lower case, we are left with a fine and sensitive poem which is worthy of a future edit - - - - - - - but only of the cases. Just leave the rest - it is wonderful and catches an attitude and atmosphere that is very elusive to the poet.
John

[Loribeth215]

I like this as is... you know, I always think poetry written in lowercase sort of lends to a softer speech when said aloud. But more importanlty, I love the persepective here. the persona is asking to be a muse, thoug she doesn't seem to think she'll get her request. Very seductive and beautifully done. I especially like this:
want you to read this.

and put me in the spaces in your poetry.

let me live in between your thoughts.

let me be your muse.


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