Flying Blind

we laughed behind the phenomenon

watching with hands clasped across our smiles,

this had to be forever

we waited so long

and now, we could skip to the stars 

and beyond

moments passed 

and we found ourselves barely alive

yet still breathing

our excitement, so contagious

mountains rose as we gathered steam

galaxies passed

was this a dream

somewhere, a voice

a chuckle

a scream

left to our senses, we wondered

ten seconds later

it's daylight,

so quiet

this strange kind of sensation

was it real...

Reviews

[A.L.]

My skin tingles and my stomach drops when I read this. I love that your poem is about something new. Great read, thank you for the post Alisa.

[Alisa Js]

You are very welcome DD...thank you for your comments and time.

I will be by soon.read moreYou are very welcome DD...thank you for your comments and time.

I will be by soon.

Alisa ;-)

[Tony Jordan]

I felt like I was in the flying scene from The Snowman. The mountains rising and fading then entire systems and galaxies as you speed up. Quite exhilarating Alisa. Nicely done my friend.
:)

[Alisa Js]

Thanks Tony!

What wonderful comments! Isn't is amazing how we can feel like we're flying in our dreams... and yet, we wake up to walking on legs!

lol

Wishing you well,

Alisa ;-)

[Hi]

I like this. It is whimsical and dreamy; just enough touch of reality with the last line without stealing the dream away. Thanks.

[Alisa Js]

Thanks Matt!

I appreciate your time and comments.

Wishing you well.read moreThanks Matt!

I appreciate your time and comments.

Wishing you well.

Alisa ;-)

[Ted Kniffen]

One of those dreamlike moments that we cannot decide if it actually happened or have we lost our senses. Good write, Alisa

[Alisa Js]

Hello Ted,

Isn't it amazing how the mind works??? Have you ever wondered after waking up in the morning... if what you were certain of was a dream... if it could actually be more than that, since it felt so real???

And have you ever gone through a day, finding yourself drawn back to that dream...and yet, find yourself wondering.. was it only a dream???

Or something more, we don't quite understand...

I know I have...

Thanks so much for stopping by.

Alisa ;-)

[Ted Kniffen]

Even now, Alisa, even now.

[Alisa Js]

Indeed! Indeed!

[. serah .]

~ a very eerie image pops out of this incredibly vivid and effervescent piece of poetry... ~ the closing is dramatic and effective... and i agree with the entire piece... sometimes the good and the bad in a yin and yang equation are as different as night and day... ~ excellent work, dear alisa...

[Alisa Js]

Thank you serah....

I appreciate you and look forward to reading your thoughts.

Sending you smiles across the miles..

Alisa ;-_)

[. serah .]

~ you're very welcome... and ditto... :)