Almost

it was me

in the back of a very long  line

a stampede exactly

at just the right time

some place rustic, along a mountain side

where life had meaning

in another world,

in another time

this ruckus was a bit more than I actually bargained for

especially when help was the objective, initially

and yet, I've been here almost eight years

feels like forever

and I thought you would wait 

like all the times we planned and discussed

laughing for ages 

knowing this was real

I believed it then,

I believe it now

guess that makes one of us.

quiet nights on the ocean front

it used to mean something

now, it means nothing

and I don't even care for the view

without you

what does it matter

when it was almost...

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Alisa Js,
"Almost" speaks of waiting, hoping, "8 years you waited." It is always interesting to me how our minds work. We remember! "Where life had meaning..in another world." Even when it would maybe be better not to remember.
Why is this? Sharing caring emotions- letting down our guard...it is like we let the other person get close. "Quiet nights on the ocean front."
People need one another. We want affirmation; to love and be loved.
Such a risk to love, but we do.
Beautiful and vulnerable poem.
blessings to you.........Kathy

[Alisa Js]

Thanks Kathy,

I appreciate your time and comments.

Alisa

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Alisa,
Your welcome. I wish you good in your life today and some fun too.
Kathy

[Ardra]

some place rustic, along a mountain side
where life had meaning
in another world,
in another time

Your poems reading them makes you feel lost in the thick mist of memories....

[Alisa Js]

Thank you, Ria for your time and comments... I will be by soon.

Alisa

[Ken Simm.]

The sadness, no, poignancy in this is palable. It leaks tears, gracefullness and memories.
I too see that a film noir voice over would fit this perfectly.

[Alisa Js]

Thank you, Ken for stopping by. I will be by soon.

Alisa

[Tony Jordan]

Wow - what a line
'I guess that makes one of us' - as if delivered by Bacall herself to the lead in a smoke-filled piano bar.
Such style and grace here Alisa.
Beautifully bittersweet.

[Alisa Js]

Thank you, Tony for your comments and time.

You know I appreciate you...

read moreThank you, Tony for your comments and time.

You know I appreciate you...

I trust all is well.

Alisa ;-0