Webbed.

Poem - ATC

I once knew a spider,

A beautiful creature very patient,

He met a sad ending however

Or rather a beginning of sorts?

You see Mr Spider webbed himself in so many lies

That he began to eat himself believing that he was the fly!

None of us other folk could convince him otherwise,

How carefully precise each web had been threaded,

The time and detail he had dedicated yet

Perhaps he knew all along where he would be headed? 

-"A spider once webbed too many lies,

He began to eat himself thinking that he is the fly. "

Author's Note

- This short piece creeps up in some of my other work however it is a lesson I have learnt and one of the philosophies I personally live by. You know what they say "sharing is caring."

- Enjoy.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the use of the spider and the story.
"You see Mr Spider webbed himself in so many lies
That he began to eat himself believing that he was the fly!"
Easy to do. Create a web of lies to create a poor ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This was a good lesson. I've never understood compulsive liars.
I could never put so much effort into keeping up with all of those lies.
It reminds me of how ponzi schemes eventually collapse.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Thank you :)

[Emily]

I love it when you do narrative poetry!
Well done!
Keep it up!

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Haha thank you Emily :) I really appreciate your reviews. I agree I think you're right this style is definitely what I'm best at.

[Clay Feet]

Short, yet encompasses the entire cycle of life from entrapping predator to self-accursed prey. How many lives must be devoured to completely make the character transfiguration from hunter to hunted. How much mental misery to realize the error of one's lifetime of deceit to the even more grievous misery of self-loathing that feeds upon the mind and body.

Excellent concept captured succinctly.

Good show, Ally!

- Ron

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

glad you enjoyed it :) thanks very much

[beautiful dreamer]

small almost too small. a few more lines may do it some good. but has the potential to be very deep in meaning!

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

i'm getting the feeling the general feedback here is it's too short... see i didn't have much else to say on the matter... i thought it said quite a lot maybe read it again?

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

p.s i love your name.... beautiful dreamer

[beautiful dreamer]

i think its got good meaning if you really mull it over a few times. but i thinkit could definitely use a little detail. explain what kind of lies he had webbed that got him to that point. really just two or three lines would really make the poem!

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

nope that's for the reader to decide it's a billion stories im not budging on this one! also it is sneakily into one of my longer poems ;)

[beautiful dreamer]

hmm ill have to find it. i understand sometimes it is what it is. but thanks for hearing me out

[Shekinah2015]

Very funny and clever! Could be a great piece of work if you make it longer.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

i'm getting the feeling the general feedback here is it's too short... see i didn't have much else to say on the matter... i thought it said quite a lot maybe read it again?

[ANM]

Very apt ...... ..........

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

i'm getting the feeling the general feedback here is it's too short... see i didn't have much else to say on the matter... i thought it said quite a lot maybe read it again?

[ANM]

It did say a lot hence very apt .... More could be said but is not required , great little poem!