Solitude

A new poem

 

 

Solitude

 

 

The girl on the hill

Living with eternal altitude

Out of her free will

 

Like flying in the sky

So high

Observing from above

She's got no time for love

 

For she is the best

Left alone

Ranger

 

In control

of

just herself

 

For she can't trust

others

Like some sort of must

It bothers

 

To love...

Author's Note

An experiment

Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

I can certainly empathize with this one. I am not certain it is a loss of love although that has happened that brings me to solitude but I often crave it and seek solace in the rest from wearying others. Thank you for capturing this essence. Well done.
Light,
Siddartha

[Mr. Lopez]

Your reviews of this poem are very constructive and positive . We hear the powerful message , though there were some difficulties in the rythme. I struggle with that problem in my own writing. I too, as many have also, saught isolation after having loved and lost . Very nice piece,all said and done.

[Kaleidoscope Apocalypse]

I agree, the stanzas are a bit sporatic but for this piece they work. There were a few places where a word could have been removed or used differently, but I did like the poem as a whole. Nice job!

[Texas Ink]

I really like this one. I like how your stanzas are sporatic but there is also something about it that makes it click. Good work

[Kali the Akumu Kitten]

I agree with kelly scheppers. that one line might be better with out "just"
but ido like it .

[Kelly Scheppers]

I felt the line, "in control of just herself" perhaps would read better without the word "just". [ ...just my opinion! ]

Thank you for sending it my way!

; )

[Travis Ralston aka LIAR]

Interesting little poem here. I finished reading and just got this swift wave of emotion. Really good.

[Sparrow]

Well, even for an experiment it was touching. Holding yourself aloof has one main negative and one main positive and they're the same thing: You can't love if you hold yourself away.