If Life were a Dance

Another symbolic poem...

If life were a dance,

Showed to me,

I wouldn’t give it a chance,

Not even one.

 

From the outside,

Life seems like hell,

Looks like a painful stride,

Causing only pain.

 

And maybe hell it is,

Maybe some wouldn’t want to live again,

But maybe life is more than this,

Hell.

Maybe life is really bliss.

 

‘Cause even though it seems painful,

From time to time.

It really is gainful.

 

If life didn’t blow,

From time to time,

Then how would you know,

Any kind of delight.

 

What I am saying is,

That when life seems bad,

Only resulting in hiss,

Cherish that moment,

‘Cause without pain,

We would just all be vain.

Author's Note

Another unedited poem!

Reviews

[green dreams]

Nice poem. I like the way you write about life and describe it. Beautiful.

[Rhianne Ney]

Unedited but good... You can edit it if you want to... look back again...if you would want to...
Anyway, it points out good things... It's great (:

[Steven Cash]

Great job, Amanda. You really have a knack for poetry

[afra]

good job i love it ...well done

[Zachary_James]

Just amazing.

[LuciaMarie]

Another truthful poem from you :) this is very good just as your others.

[Nicole]

i like the symbolic imagery behind the concept of life as a dance. i really like the first stanza. and this is your first piece that i've ever read, so i'm not sure if you write freeverse, but if not, you should give it a try. with the way you use words, i feel like it would flow very naturally.

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I LOVE IT! I love the comparison of life with dance! I'm a dancer so yeah it just made me squeal utter happiness :P

[Dr. Wood ?]

It maybe needs a little editing, I still feel that you force the rhymes a little. I love the opening verse, you must be proud of that. You do not need the 4th line in the 2nd verse, it only repeats what the previous line says. I could go on but you might think all of what I am saying is a load of bull..I am no professor of literature, just a guy who writes kids poems...You most certainly have a poets soul..you just need to search a little deeper

[Amanda J. S.]

Thank you :-)

[Westminster Abbey]

Wow. This is so true! I never thought of it like that! Very good!

[Amanda J. S.]

Thank you!

[Westminster Abbey]

We aim to please :-)

[Amanda J. S.]

:-)