My Beautiful Void

A feeling living inside most depressed souls...

A void

In my heart,

my soul,

And my head.

 

That void,

Filling me with pain

With aching agony.

This void

A beautiful disaster

Beauty in form of pain

Pain and torment.

My void,

Controlling my senses,

My body,

And my soul.

Oh how I admire that beautiful,

 tormenting void.

Reviews

[Abbey Road]

Very nice. I love it 100/100

[afra]

very very beautiful ....well done

[Rhianne Ney]

This is a good write
Keep writing (:

[BIIKAY]

so very sweet

[RYDER]

i lov the use of word tormenting

[Cord Moreski]

Your use of repetition really emphasizes on the concept of your piece. I also like how you switch the words from "this void" to "my void" , because this reveals to your audience that it is very personal. Great job.

[Amanda J. S.]

Thank you :-) Glad you noticed it!

[Irvette Dauphine]

i can feel the emotional.. great poem, like this :)

[Amanda J. S.]

:-)

[Steven Cash]

I liked it a lot Amanda, really, I did.

It was amazing, and somehow reminded me of the beautiful, yet haunting, power of the human mind

[Amanda J. S.]

Yay! Glad you liked it! :-)

[Jamillet]

Sounds beautiful. I like how you made soemthing sad and upsetting sound lovely. Hell yeah! *high fives*

[Amanda J. S.]

Thank you! *squeals and jumps up and down while clapping*

[Jamillet]

HELL YEAH! *jumps with you then rolls away like a pencil*

[Amanda J. S.]

:-D