The Spark

its a poem written in victorian english

Untreasur’d, of thy glory O’ state my!
Burghers stand thy wrath
Ragged shine, now thy
Erring we, lack troth.

Barred of verity, our quintessence
World-lings see thy taxing
Sauce us, of thy essence
Cast the flouted relaxing.

Whilst thee in dust’s beak,
Fond coz stay bloody
Of parts come a-peak
Rise bonny I prithee!

An if thee pity,
Shall then change
Hatred of civility
Motley by witty.

So to us ‘scape,
Turn to mend our shades fake.
Entame us or castaway.
Spark hither, spark thither, O’ spark stay!
----- Amar laksh

Reviews

[Pragya Saxena]

Language mahnn ...Hats Off :)

[de_maruf]

fine

[Patricia B. Hepler]

Unique and interesting work.
*pat

[Blue Ivory]

Wow, I could never use Victorian English! Well done :)

[amarlaksh]

Thank you for all the reviews

[Alexa Tasch]

Very creative! You don't see many poems writtten in victorian english. Great write!!

[Pradeep Nair]

The Victorian Era....
you experiments a lot and you succeeds...

[Annabelle Lee]

victorian english. i admire your adventuresome spirit and how you so creativly enjoy experimenting with new things. I had a hard time focusing on this one and perhaps didnt catch the true meaning of it. but dont let that discourage you. keep writing!

[quinfinn]

this type of Chauceresque text is difficult enough when done to perfection. you have trodden where few writers dare to go and i commend you, but keep in mind that the tense becomes very difficult and confusing, even to the accomplished literary professor. if i had my way, Chaucer would have been ostracised form literature for his bad taste and creepy style. anyway, good job...

[Adam Whitworth]

too busy to elaborate, but there's lots not to like!

[amarlaksh]

then its ok i doesn't have a soul, right??

[amarlaksh]

oops sorry it is "it" not "i"

[Adam Whitworth]

not good

[amarlaksh]

Well thanks for your honest review but could you please elaborate what was not good?(Although i also don't like it very much!)