To Breathe

To Breathe

A Poem by Amber Elaine Marshall
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A poem about dying due to loneliness...being lonely for a length of time has a tendency of slowly killing one's spirit...

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To Breathe
As each day and night passes it seems the empty void
Grows larger, with it an endless void of loneliness
Every night I feel as though I am gasping for air trying
Desperately to catch my breath. The empty void
That surrounds me consumes me entirely. It ravages away
At my soul, the empty air of the void suffocates me
With each minute that passes, it grows increasingly stale,
Humid, stuffy. I can feel the oxygen dissipate, my
Lungs shriveling and dying with each struggling breath.
Regardless of my efforts to take air in my vitality
Remains neglected. The void of loneliness will not deviate,
Let alone reside...it only covets me closer to death.
 

© 2013 Amber Elaine Marshall


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Wow! The similarities on my feelings exact. You did an excellent job of presenting your imagery and feelings in this write. Hats off!

~Rob~

Posted 8 Years Ago


still waters are the easiest polluted, make a splash a wave hell a tsunami and see where it takes you, maybe to fresh air. very well written poem, truly shows your feelings!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a detailed view of loneliness and what it can do to us internally. It's no fun, I've been there. Good poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Real nice love it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Loneliness is the greatest of all killers. So very beautifully stated here:

"The empty void
That surrounds me consumes me entirely. It ravages away
At my soul,

- At such times, what we would not do to hear a familiar loving voice or feel a loving touch. Very well told.... Thanks.

Posted 11 Years Ago


a really solid analogy here...and this can't help but make me think of dylan thomas' "do not go gently into that good night"

lots of strong feeling in this write.

jacob

Posted 11 Years Ago


I felt such situation many times in my life.
I get nervous sometimes.
However,we have to move ahead.
We must overcome.
Your piece speaks eloquently.
Congratulations!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Powerful, without a doubt. I'll probably have to go and think about this...for the next week or two.

Good read.

~ Fuzzy

Posted 11 Years Ago


Loneliness can make feel like we have no reason to be. The poem led the reader into sad emotions and struggle to find reason to be alive. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

harsh realities we face...

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Amber Elaine Marshall
Amber Elaine Marshall

Stockton, CA



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I'm a single mother of two wild little boys.I grew up in a rough town and had a tough childhood, I am the product of a broken home and my father was an hardcore drug user. I have become a strong pers.. more..

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