Burn

 

I say we burn this city whole,

Take turns lighting matches.

Let's not get caught by passersby.

When our names are marked,

Say we did it for free fire for all:

 

It was for the love of hate,

It was for the desire for passion.

 

Reviews

[Caleb Pendleton]

Of all the poems in the contest, you were one of the few authors that defined fire as an attitude. As something that someone aspires to and lives for. You know it's destructive and dangerous, but that's why you love it; that's why you admire and respect it. I can't say I condone the sort of person this poem portrays, I can say that it revealed to me the motivation behind some of the people I come into contact with in my daily life.

[saren call]

Pass the matches --
i'd have your back.

Cheers.

[Chris Willits]

That was a short but sweet type of poem. I liked it.

[Kenji Light]

I like the message you use here about calling for rebellion and actually standing for something even when it seems as though there is nothing to stand up for at all. It appears as though the people that you are trying so desperately to call to attention are bored and living mundane lives without some great oppressors or great evils around every bend. No threats proposed by pompous politicians, no crooked cop with crack packed in the cruiser glove box. No racist statements, no sexism in the work place, there was nothing, and yet, you wished to call to arms and create excitement. I love how you wish to grant the people you are trying to reach a passion. Things that need fighting for are often overlooked and your piece is reminding us that even when things seem fine, perfect, like there's nothing bothering us and nothing ever will, there are still people who are being screwed over and are in need of defense against the wicked who choose to keep them down. I know that this piece got me worked up. Thanks a lot. -Kenji Light

[D.L. Simmons]

i like this poem a lot, not so much for the words themselves, but for the passion BEHIND the words...and I think
that you could even make it more clear, more powerful with a little tweaking. the middle line confuses me, and while i don't think that poetry is something that is supposed to be completely understood, i think it should never be muddy. If it needs to be confusing, make it crisply confusing. does that make any sense or am i just blithering? ;)

keep writing,
D.L. Simmons

[siri]

hmmm interesting words i love writing that give me something to think about you entertained my mind thanks for wonderful read !!! good job ill read you around!

[Perdition]

I have a gallon of unleaded in my hat if it helps...I love this one!

[Keiry<3]

awesome...i love this...it would actually be nice to blow blow tha city up...=]]...make people actually "wake up"
i think i said this before...but i really like the flow in your writing =]

[Glenn]

HAHA I like this one. Tear apart this society and give everyone a show of light.