Wishful Hurting

Guys know how to make a girl write, and to make a girl hurt.

A slowly formed change in pace,
Time will never be the same again.
Following a leader who seems lost,
Tripping over nothing at all;
Repetition taunts the shameless,
and uneventful timeless tales
Haunt the minds of the inert.
Sour's notes and bitter sweet's words;
They all boil down to one temptation:
The seasons are askew, the leaves have
Yet to change, and the water seems to
Accumulate in all the wrong places:
You aren't the same as when we met.


Fear builds up inside, a hurtful gesture
Here and there; let the clouds fall
And the stars be damned;
You're a hopeless amount--
Waiting to be loved at all.
Never a chance laid untouched,
and never a touch left unchanced;
Waiting for all the right steps,
and giving away all those captivating smiles.
You are impracticable, and disdainful,
a conceited b*****d with nothing left:
Take a flying leap, and tell me how you land.

Author's Note

The rhythm might be off a few words.

Reviews

[Natalie C]

Let me start off by saying your title really drew me in. Loved the way you written this piece, very emotion felt with nice and intriguing imagery. Captivating you readers and forcing them to take the front seat to emotions so precious.

Nice job, I really enjoyed this.

[Perdition]

Wow.."repittion taunts the shameless"..great line!
Wow.."repittion taunts the shameless"..great line!
Wow.."repittion taunts the shameless"..great line!
...and in the end the jazz between your lines leap out at me like a velvet red room of indignation...the unkempt eyes of a lover at the edge of something great ...oblivious in the need to fall. Great to read these depths again.

[LostCauze[:P]]

A very enjoyable read. Seeing as how i can feel your disdain for this person. I really liked how you structured it and formatted it. Keep writing.