A spring time song for Jacob

There are writers I really admire on this site -- this is my pitiful attempt at writing something that reminds me of Jacob --

A forlorn coffee can
stands sentinel atop
an ugly gray snow bank
once pristine and white,
now lumpy gravel and ice,

the rain kisses it lightly
coercing it to join the
rivers of mud flowing
down the hill,

revealing pot holes
and yesterday's news
encrusted with winter's
grime --

the birds, know
more than we do,
and gather to eat the
grubs of spring.

Reviews

[Bacchus]

love this...
can't wait til his heart
has a spring again.
may we encourage the winter
so the spring is more beautiful!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. Jacob was one of the first writers I started reading here, and who started reading me. Many of the writers I wrote about in here are no longer writing at the cafe' -- luckily, Jacob still is.:)

[Rita L. Sev]

A hopeful springtime poem, with the bite of reality for good measure. You have captured the essence of Jacob's style, particularly in the third stanza. Well crafted, KL, and a great nod to a fellow poet.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks very much, I try every once in a while to do a shout out to fellow poets. This one was long overdue, given my infatuation with Jacob's work.:)

[Bright Ocean Star]

I like it. It does resemble Jacob's work. It is very descriptive and slightly anthropomorphic. A simple snapshot of nature's work. very nice. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

thank you. I saw that coffee can and had to do it. Ever read Tom Robbins?

[Bright Ocean Star]

No, i'm afraid not. I'll have to rectify that shortcoming, though. Thank you for letting us read it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is beautiful...wonderful personification...

i felt it...and thank you for this poem, KL.

jacob

[Lyn Anderson]

You are very welcome. I do so admire your writes. :)

[redflutterby]

Jacob is one of my favorite writers as well. ;-)

This poem is fantastic....and it does remind me of his style. But its clearly your shining creativity. Yes the birds do know better then us...spring is right around the corner!! ;-)

[Lyn Anderson]

I hope he likes it.:) Every thing I read of his makes me feel like an amateur.

[redflutterby]

Lol....I'm sure he will like it and be honored by your admiration. His style and talent are amazing...but we each have our own way. I love your poems...;-)