heartburn

a transient passage through my mind

Legends.
Aztecs
on altars
chests open
hearts devoured
in vain
attempts to
what?

who knows?
an abstract
feeling.
an offering
to an unforgiving
deity.

when the man
who made
false promises
on an altar
of synthetic afterthoughts
eats your heart,
what satisfaction
does he get?

he thinks
he ate it all,
but he did not.
and now he
can live with
the heartburn ... 

                        knowing I saved
                        the choicest cuts
                        for someone
                        new.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

Dark with a twist at the end. Good one

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks for the review, Baby. I love saying that, it sounds so sexy, lol.

[willweb]

Sounds like they need to do a sacrifice to the God of Pepcid. This was kind of dark but I liked it.

[Lyn Anderson]

Kind of dark. And you are more than Kind of missed. Are you just visiting? Thanks for the review. I had one a bit ago I felt like I was chanelling your love angst

[willweb]

Be careful with that, I hear it is contagious. Not sure yet...just kind of sneaking around a little.

[David Scott]

(soft chuckle)... ha.
Perfect revenge to go on and be better off for it.
I think I may be running low on Prilosec. ;)
To me this was a great satire of the matrimonial "alter".
We too often sacrifice our lives to some false expectation of love and live trapped in bad relationships because it would displease some idea of "god" if we simple let go and found a better life.
Yes, a promise should be forever and we are all better off when it is, but part of keeping this promise is how we act day by day and moment by moment. The vows are long ago broken before any infidelity ever occurs... It is a condition of the heart after all. Anyhow, deep subject. I better shut up already. ha. :)
Perfect poetic prodding!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much, I love the insight.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A telling and expressive piece here that yearns to be devoured! well done, great read.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I always appreciate your visits.

[Pryde Foltz]

when the man
who made
false promises
on an altar
of synthetic afterthoughts
eats your heart,
what satisfaction
does he get?

A wise man once said forgive them for they know not what they do ... but their egos sure as hell get it... ego maniac should have to wear a shirt. A really great one here, KL.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much, I appreciate it.

[MomzillaNC]

Heartburn… yes. They always claim to regret the pain they cause when "they" break your heart. If it hurts… let it. Let it burn. Take back the best of yourself and leave them the dross. Well penned.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you very much.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[KeeD]

This was mega creative and well said... So done with the people who only know how to devour all the goodness people have to offer without giving two hoots about the individual. Pretenders take your voracious appetites elsewhere.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes thank you, and I appreciate taking time.

[MsJewel]

You are so creative and so witty. Truly brilliant writing...and you chose the perfect song to accompany your words. One for my library! :) Julie

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much I am so pleased you liked this one

[Bright Ocean Star]

Lol! I love the way you conclude a good poem, KLG. This one is brilliant. I love how you develop and evolve a thought from Aztecs to one particular ugly individual. Beautiful sentiment and great metaphor!

[Einstein Noodle]

i am captivated by the music and video .. had to just go ahead and watch the whole thing so i could concentrate on your poem .. (love a good fight)

oooooooooooo! i love "heartburn" you are on top of your game with this one .. love the analogy, history, spirituality, and guts of this poem ..it's "smart" ... well done!! love love love your killer turn in the last verse .. into my library it goes!
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks, I appreciate the rave review. And this song totally makes me laugh when I hear it -- can't help but think of the ex sulking in a corner ...:)