Mind scribbles while I listen

some thought strings from an afternoon

Mind scribbles on a sunny afternoon

doodling flowers and trees

words wash over me 

like the cool autumn breeze

and I wonder if you know

that in every breath

I feel you

every song

I hear you

every minute

I want you

near …

how time has flown

and stood in exactly

the same place …

is still a mystery

to me.

we missed each other's firsts

and turned a corner down 

the road we thought was straight ...

and in the darkness shines a light

it's always you ---

Author's Note

captcha thriver. I like that a whole lot

Reviews

[M.E.Lyle]

I think one of the strangest things about love is that it is so strange. Just when you think you have things figured out...you don't.
Years down the line you're still trying to figure it out.
It is never a straight road that love takes you. More of a roller coaster ride. You always remember that first coaster ride.
You've written this so well. It flows like sweet caramel cream.

[Lyn Anderson]

Well thank you. I am a bit of a sap :)

[barleygirl]

LOVE! LOVE! LOVE! I'm not a huge fan of romantic writing, but this one is near-perfection becuz of the simplicity & clarity of your observations. This paints love with precious pops of everyday thoughts keeping two people lovingly connected. This kind of love is written about so seldom, I sometimes forget how irresistible it might be! (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[Lyn Anderson]

That totally warms my heart. Yup. The unfiltered. I am smitten. Smiling even when I don't want to. :)

[Chris Shaw]

Lovely romantic thoughts. Second stanza particularly appealing, and that sums up love for me. When someone is constantly on your mind, from waking till you fall asleep. Nicely conveyed Lyn.

Chris

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I appreciate it

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, but the romantic road is never straight, my friend. Such lovely reminiscing if a bit poignant. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you ever so much.

[Paul Bell]

In this mad hectic life, we lead, it's all we can do to reminisce.
But when we do, and someone special pops in, what a treat.
Probably the greatest gift we have, our memory.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, I would agree, thank you

[Onlyme]

Dreamy, captivating, lulling poem of drifting in our thoughts as we contempt.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks Dawn for taking the time

[Neville]

this is what poetry is about..

'and I wonder if you know
that in every breath
I feel you
every song
I hear you
every minute
I want you
near …
and that is what I call love..... N

[Lyn Anderson]

I am so glad you reviewed this piece. Thank you, it is close to my heart

[Neville]

my sincere pleasure

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Doodling thoughts in words, prose, and pictures are poetically encaptured with the wordplay of your lovely write - nice read and pleasing share - well done! :-)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you very much

[Relic]

The romanticism theme is pretty strong in this. Trying to keep someone you're in love with off your mind is tough. Everything around you looks better.

Nice one, Lyn.

[Lyn Anderson]

Oddly enough it's a new experience for me (well, newish) on a scale of past versus the last few years

[Ana Papaya]

this is incredibly romantic, time moves on but sometimes those strong feelings stay right where they are

[Lyn Anderson]

Romantic was the goal so mission accomplished. :)

[Ana Papaya]

Big time. :)