Hope to the END

 

 

Hope had entrapped my soul

My vision blurred,

I had braved ahead,

Kept moving until I was lifeless.

 

23^rd June 2007

 

Reviews

[Madelaine]

Aw, this is such a sad view of hope. It makes me really sad.

"entrapped" sounded kinda funny to me in that sentence. Like the grammar is fine, but I think you could've used a better word.

I think it's amazing how people can right such a short poem, and really create an effect on the reader.

Thanks for entering.

[Emily B]

wow!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Aammmm!! Very powerful indeed...
"Hope had entrapped my soul." I loved this line a lot..
Really a sad piece :(
But....like your every other write..This one's also Awesome :)

[Rain]

You ever think of writing children's stories ? lol. Another very moving piece about lost love. You said you lost 50 ? Rain..

[Danielle Asher]

your poem sums up why i am looking for someone to help me understand hope. Short and yet it has such an impact. great piece! Thanks for sharing and entering it into the contest.
peace,
Danielle

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

Very good. But the poem seems to 'read weird' to me. I think there might be something wrong with the tense, or maybe it has something to do with passive/active voice. I can't really tell just yet. Still, the poem is short and sweet and gives hard detail to a quick moment. Great write, and best of luck

[Serendipity]

Hope is not lifeless. Hope is moving ahead and reaching a happy destiny. A destiny of peace and tranquility. May you find the peace and tranquility that you seek.

[Roxy's Writes Rocks th..]

Wow

Have I felt this before. I just relived it again. This tiny little four lined write has the power of a heavyweights punch! Man that is writing at its best. Keep going through this pain and soon the life-store will become a bit bigger and lighter, not lifeless any longer.

Peace- Roxy

[curley]

I feel like I can totally relate to this right now. "Kept moving until I was lifeless." < - I know what' that's like. Short, but good. Thanks for sharing! God bless.

[desertraven]

perserverance determination and as always to the point. Always a pleasure to read your poems!
Sandra♥

[Dorothy]

Aww this is so sad. And yet can be true at times. You paint such powerful images with so few lines. That is hard to do and yet it seems effortless. Great job!