Traveling with you

Self - explanatory

From dreams to dust, I

 

Have traveled a long, long way

 

With you in my thoughts.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Dave "Doc" Rogers]

Thank you for submitting this to:
Well Crafted - July 2007


Cheers!
Doc.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is really a very vivid haiku, and so complex in itself!
When I read the first and the second line, I got that feel of lovingness and oneness in it but then the closing line left me numb...
"With you in my thoughts." - This left me out of my words!

We-humans always expect our love to walk with us in every walk of our life, because when someone hold your hand in hard times it revive your soul and gives you a spirit to fight for it and the same goes with our good times. As someone can only experience a complete smile only with that special person...let it be dust or dreams, but we always love to be with them! And the best thing about it that...when we start walking with them, then after sometime...it is not the destination which matters a lot, because we start living our life in the journey itself...
Here also, I found that feel but....you have walked with him only in your thoughts and I guess you have lived that journey from your behalf!

But I really loved it, dark and beautifully written!

[Mark Pearce]

Great pic.

You'd do well on deviantArt.com. The picture would attract attention. We've got a little writer's clutch that's formed over there too.

You can get to it through my site at

www.marzguy.deviantart.com

[Rain]

You know what ? I'm waiting for the bright side of you to come glistening through. I know it's there. Rain..

[A. L. Robinson]

lovely! i'm in love with haikus and senryus. Well done!

[Gandré]

hello my friend, thanks a lot for reviewing Thank you for your words... I appreciate.
this is sweet little thought. We all have those images, during our day-sleeping..

"Life is perhaps most wisely regarded as a bad dream
between two awakenings, and every day is a life
in miniature."
Marco Millions� (1928) act 2, sc. 2
Eugene O'Neill 1888�1953
American dramatist

[Jenny Davis]

Very lovely, we all take the thoughts of someone we care about with us, always!
Very nicely written indeed :)

[Shalini R]

this is lovely
very relateable
great job

[Dezaraye]

This is such a lovely sentiment. I love it.

[Tai Chi Italy]

Short and sweet haiku here Caffeine, not sure of the sylable count though, if you raise the 'I' onto the first line, it works perfectly with the 5/7/5 count but who is counting and the Japanese haiku has not such boundaries to my knowledge. One typo I noted, 'Travelled' A beautiful sentiment in so few words, good luck with the comp, all the best Tai

[Jaded Perception]

awesome short but sweet...congrats also!