You visited me again

Incomplete poem

So like always, I bury my face in the pillow

To muffle my silent screams

Sleep is many many miles away

So I wait for another dawn to break…

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

I hope this will complete it :

A day seems like an eternity without you,
As I stare the crowded street from my window.
Staring at the mass, searching for your face,
You won’t be coming back even though I know.


A tear dropped from my eyes to my hand,
With no one to catch it before it would fall.
No one to save me from the endless nights,
When in darkness it takes its painful toll.

So like always, I bury my face in the pillow
To muffle my silent screams
Sleep is many many miles away
So I wait for another dawn to break…

I closed my eyes and in darkness I found myself,
A picture of yours appeared and nothing else.
Another tear rolled while breaking my pain,
Here in obscurity you visited me once again.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

"Sleep is many many miles away
So I wait for another dawn to break�
This is such a powerful line, Okay! it may be incomplete, but for me , it is complete in its own way...
I really loved these lines a lot, purely heart wrenching.

[Marie]

Wow, this was a sad and emotion flilled dream. Great job.

[Donald Cole]

nicely written and smooth. the love I had and I look for again. enticing. lovely poem

[SM Davis]

So like always, I bury my face in the pillow

To muffle my silent screams

Sleep is many many miles away

So I wait for another dawn to break�


Many of these nights have I had. This is a very poigniant piece.

[sunnyz7]

eerie deja vu type dream....seems to happen when we cant have something...and yet we know...even in our dreams...that its only a dream....great write

[V. K. Harris]

So very intense. Beautiful.

[Dorothy]

Wow! Very powerful and sad. I like it a lot. It is always the worst when you can't sleep and your mind wonders to things that can never be. Very beautiful write!

[Celtic Cat]

This is utterly heart-wrenching. It pulls at the core of my being... I know these dreams and the torture of awakening from them. At least, as you said, you knew it couldn't be true, even in your dream. While that's a very strongly painful statement, perhaps it was easier to wake up from it that way, instead of believing it was true only to awake to find the truth. Parting is hard, endings can be crushing, and memories always linger. This is a beautiful depiction of a pain we share.

Some cultures believe that what happens in a dream really happens, only on another level... subconsciously, astrally, I don't know. I do know that dreams have helped, harmed and confused me, but still a person must sleep. I've often worked through issues in dreams only to wake and realize I did infact make progress on this level as well.

Hopefully, it's not as painful today as it was the day you wrote this.
Peace, Love and Light,
Cat

[Jessica]

Amazing! This poem was so beautiful and sad... I love the last two lines. Very good job.