TEARS

      TEARS

SOMETIMES              
WHEN IT'S                 
QUIET AND          
I AM ALONE               
MY THOUGHTS      
THEY ESCAPE        
MY HEART         
TURNS TO              
STONE........     
I HAVE NO
CONTROL
BUT I TRY TO
HOLD ON
BUT MY PULSE
IT IS RACING
MY EMOTIONS
THEY ARE
GONE..........
MY LIPS
START TO
QUIVER AND
MY BROW IS
A FROWN
I LIVE OVER
MY PAST ALL
THE TIMES I
WAS DOWN...
I CARRY A             
WEIGHT DEEP         
DOWN INSIDE        
SO WHEN IT           
COMES LOOK-      
ING                   
THERE'S NO         
WHERE TO         
HIDE...........                         
I MELT INTO
THE CENTER
CURL UP IN
A BALL AND
I CAVE IN ON
MYSELF AS THE
TEARS START
TO FALL........
THEY RUN
DOWN MY
FACE LIKE
THE RAIN ON
A PANE IN
THE WINDOW
OF LIFE THEY
ARE KEEPING
ME SANE!

ANGELEA PAUGH
1.12.17

Reviews

[Sir_Anonymous]

I admit it did bother me with the structure but the flow stayed from beginning to end and honestly as long as you continue rhyme while monologuing your doing a good job.

I hardly cry I'm more of the bottle it up and think on it later type of guy.

Not something I would really think of to write about but you did so thanks for sharing.

I loved the image at the bottom with the words plastered on the glass of the window and rain dropping on it.

It was a good read and worth the praise that has been showered down on it.

Sincerely, Now Your Friend Sir_Anonymous

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'TEARS'
angeleapaugh,
Sometimes to feel the time peel away and to relive or remember is necesary to heal and learn from our life lessons. This writing was a beautiful poem of expression deep and descriptive sorrow. So human, so vulnerable. Their are times to go and cry I think.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Eyes_wide_open]

This poem really fit the mood I am in right now. It helped me to strongly relate to your piece.
I found it interesting that the poem begins and ends in a way that sort of shows the steps of a panic attack in a way.
I could feel the sadness. Anytime I feel when I read, I know that the piece is nicely written.

[angeleapaugh]

Thank you.

[Najam Us Saher]

Truly expressed the moment of pain and sorrow about what a person goes through...

[Chris A Jones]

Beautifully written. The window panes are a nice touch.

[angeleapaugh]

The structure is in question here I know but i I was afraid it would'nt be read pane to pane or left to right. The reader would get lost in the reading.

[Lovecraft]

No, it works pretty well. ;)

[Paul Bell]

Well i don't know if they are the windows of life.
But i like it. Nothing wrong with crying, gets it out.

[lua]

the structure works so well with the idea of uncontrollable emotion

[Lovecraft]

Pretty strange structure, but I think it works well with the content. Nice imagery.