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A Poem by angeleapaugh

BROKEN


IT'S BROKEN I AM AS I STAND HERE TODAY
THOUGH I'M QUIET INSIDE I HAVE LOTS TO SAY


I SCREAM TO THE CEILING AND I BEAT ON THE WALL
I'M SHRINKING INSIDE BUT I CAN STAND TALL


YOU SEE THE DOOR OPEN BUT I SEE IT SHUT
I FEEL LIKE I'M CLEAN BUT I'M COVERED IN SOOT


I'M LIVING IN DARKNESS AFRAID OF THE LIGHT
MY EYES THEY ARE CLOSED I'M AFRAID OF MY SIGHT


I WANT THINGS TO BE BETTER BUT I'M AFRAID THEY ARE WORSE
STAND BESIDE ME MY FRIEND AS I THROW TERROR TO VERSE


IT'S A LONG ROAD I TRAVEL AND I WALK IT ALONE
MY DARKNESS IS ICE AND IT CHILLS TO THE BONE


NO FIRE WILL MELT THE CORE OF MY SOUL
NO ACTOR COULD EVER PORTRAY MY ROLE


I'M HEADED TO NOWHERE AND I'M GETTING THERE FAST
I'M GOING TO A PLACE WHERE DREAMS NEVER LAST


DON'T TRY TO RIDE WITH ME FOR I GO ALONE
TO A HELL THAT IS CUTTING RIGHT INTO
MY BONE.


ANGELEA PAUGH


© 2017 angeleapaugh



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man! blistering terror indeed ...the spiritual/psychological self journey I see in this poem is exquisite ..I say exquisite because we want to run away when standing before the "Light" ..fear rises to overwhelming heigths and depths to dissuade us .. we can not fail to stand tall as you say .. I read a long time ago that along this path fear is the first of our enemies to defeat .. and it is not by our own power nor strength .. but honesty that does it .. I can not help but be roused in support of your speaker .. tho it is alone we must must travel the inner path .. very inspiring write my friend ..love the brutal honesty in it .. sail on says i! sail on! :))))
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

angeleapaugh

1 Year Ago

You inspire me...thank you!



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I can't help but to feel deep empathy for your speaker. It seems that not only is she broken, but lost as well. You ask "stand beside me my friend" but then warn "Don't try to ride with me for I go alone."
Surely you should have someone with you, but is that someone long gone?
Very thought provoking writing.

Take care - Dave

Posted 9 Months Ago


I loved this poem , it sent chills up my spine

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

angeleapaugh

1 Year Ago

Thank You!
The best part of this message is the way you use a pair of contrasting ideas to show how it is. The rhyme & rhythm make this feel like an old western song about riding off on a trail of tears. In a couple places, I would prune a word or two to maintain that steady loping rhythm thru-out. The desperation is painted vividly in words & there's a fierceness warning us to stand back!

Posted 1 Year Ago


I believe purgatory is for the pissed off people.
"DON'T TRY TO RIDE WITH ME FOR I GO ALONE
TO A HELL THAT IS CUTTING RIGHT INTO
MY BONE."
I liked the above lines. I understand the place. Where pain and misery is being alive. Accepting proper end. Thank you Angelea for sharing the amazing poem.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


You have created some memorable lines fellow poetress. NO FIRE WILL MELT THE CORE OF MY SOUL
NO ACTOR COULD EVER PORTRAY MY ROLE and STAND BESIDE ME MY FRIEND AS I THROW TERROR TO VERSE
The only line that was confusing..was the very first one... i look forward to reading more of you. Write on..

Posted 1 Year Ago


man! blistering terror indeed ...the spiritual/psychological self journey I see in this poem is exquisite ..I say exquisite because we want to run away when standing before the "Light" ..fear rises to overwhelming heigths and depths to dissuade us .. we can not fail to stand tall as you say .. I read a long time ago that along this path fear is the first of our enemies to defeat .. and it is not by our own power nor strength .. but honesty that does it .. I can not help but be roused in support of your speaker .. tho it is alone we must must travel the inner path .. very inspiring write my friend ..love the brutal honesty in it .. sail on says i! sail on! :))))
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

angeleapaugh

1 Year Ago

You inspire me...thank you!

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angeleapaugh
angeleapaugh

Smalltown, W.V., United States Minor Outlying Islands



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I love poetry. I write from the heart. I am a novice in a world of professionals. "Carry on my friend and i will do the same!" more..

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