I can't Erase you

The affection,

In your face,

Your ocean blue eyes,

Your hair,

Brown and fare

 

Your body,

In which,

My heart desires to be chained,

Your image so mind blowing,

Head to toe,

I can't stop thinking of you,

Stuck and lost inside my head,

I need you,

 

Deeper and deeper,

My thoughts of you,

How I fall in love so quick,

Through the night,

Through the day,

Your image,

Rests in my head,

No escape,

No where to run,

It's trapped in my head,

 

Would you be glad,

If I let you out,

By stabbing a hole in my head,

The hole of freedom,

It will set you free,

I'm sorry,

No way is that worthy of my life,

 

Thinking of you so much,

Could make me lose my mind,

Stuck within my imagination,

How do I overcome you,

 

Love,

It screams out of my heart,

Love is passionate and beautiful,

It reminds me of you,

Love must be the reason,

For why I can't forget you,

 

 

Reviews

[Dupree]

It has a good flow. It's very descriptive. It shows your passion for the person yet it also shows how much you wish to be free of them. It's sad how many times we fall for someone who we later regret and wish we could forget. I adore this piece. Keep up the good work.

- Dupree

[David W Moore III]

I love the line "in Which my body desires to be chained" great image. Question for you: I can't erase you - wh that title? Seems to be a strightforward lve poem. Is it unanswered? Or why do you want to erase your love. Also one tiny thing - you use image twice in fairly close proximity. Maybe look for another word to replce one.
I like it. Very thoughtful and emotional. Good job.

[aseel]

it's awosem realy !! i love it so much keep it up :)

[Tim]

ANOTHER good one! Awsome!

[Tahna]

Yeah this is good. a lot of emotion in your write...
This poem feels really passionate...
Keep writing like this, Rosie...Its awesome! :-)

[Daniel Gardner]

This is really nice. Well written and passionate.

[Undying Glory]

yep, superbly passionate work, really, really good. it's really nice, and that's what i like most about love, you finally and truly appreciate a person for what he/she truly is.
"Love,
It screams out of my heart,
Love is passionate and beautiful,
It reminds me of you,
Love must be the reason,
For why I can't forget you,"
wonderful!!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

what a passionate and electric place of love you create~ so beautifully rendered through word composition to relate the powerful emotions ~

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes when the love is true. It burn forever. I still see shadow of woman lost 30 years ago in dreams. I like the desire and emotion in your words. So many strong statements made the poem a powerful poem of love and memories. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Poetic Beauty]

Oh how we wish we could stop the thinking and feeling at times in our lives. Walk away free and clear but that isn't always how it happens. Love is one of the best emotions but it is the other emotions that it can trigger that can make it difficult and hard. This poem flow nicely for the most part and the emotions are clearly stated with no hidden meaning and that is painted perfectly in this piece.